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Truthful Words Echo

Your truthful words still echo ... ... ... Within my hollow h e a r t Like a bear within a |c|a|g|e| As it is t o r n a p a r t All the little pieces sca t t e r like shadows from the light. A host of silent sentinels With nothing left to guard Yet the [doors] are locked And all the windows b-a-r-r-e-d Affirming my suspicion that you, in fact, were right. In my soul's deepest cellar A place I rarely tread I buried in a shallow grave That thing I thought was d_e_a_d gone I thought I would be safe then with it from my sight. But now if I walk by the [door] Or if I glance inside to check The black tendrils ~~ of regret ~~~~~ become a noose around my (neck) As if by wicked vagabonds, I'm dragged back into the night. 9/22/16 All the Little Pieces Contest

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Date: 9/24/2016 4:13:00 PM
Very creative presentation, Jesse! Also well written. Congrats on your 1st place win! Love, Kim
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Date: 9/24/2016 9:55:00 AM
Jesse, congratulations on your first place win in my contest, this is an amazing deep and meaningful poem, so c r e a t i v e . I just love it.
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Jesse Rowe
Date: 9/26/2016 9:29:00 AM
Thank you. If it wasn't for your challenge to NOT make it a "stuck to the left margin" poem, that is probably what this would have been. I really haven't experimented much with using this style so thanks for the challenge.
Date: 9/23/2016 7:13:00 AM
Very clever write and layout. Congratulations, Kai
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Date: 9/23/2016 6:05:00 AM
Well written with a layout suiting each word, Jesse:) congratulations on top win:)
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Jesse Rowe
Date: 9/23/2016 7:13:00 AM
Thank you, Jo.
Date: 9/22/2016 7:42:00 PM
Such a powerfully written poem of regret, Jesse, and your layout of phrases and words enhance the sad imagery. Congratulations on your well-deserved First Place win. Sandra
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Jesse Rowe
Date: 9/23/2016 7:12:00 AM
Thank you. It is truly am honor because there were many deserving poems in this competition.
Date: 9/22/2016 5:04:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Jesse. Interesting rhyme scheme, and I like what you did with the layout. I love the phrase "black tendrils of regret"! Agnes
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Jesse Rowe
Date: 9/22/2016 6:49:00 PM
Thank you. I definitely went full tilt with the guideline of not using standard form. This was an interesting convention to explore.

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