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True Poetry In Motion?

I began to tell of the two pens (my couplet) I always carry tucked away in my shirt pocket, and of my humble closet which contains nary a pocketless shirt. My thoughts drifted to what by.. and how I am inspired, when my love and I began speaking of a subject very dear to me. When we finished .... in what I believe to be an infused prayer,...perhaps inspiration to some,... I saw what seemed to be liquid glass like droplets ..falling slowly from above .. as a slow motion shower into an atmosphere of what may have been, space and time. I saw no earth or sky. These liquid glass droplets were falling without disruption through a pellucid barely recognizable outline of a figure that I perceived to be a poet. Somewhere from within I asked why the poet could not be lined somehow with a shell to capture these apparently valuable liquid glass treasures. They were so clear that the atmosphere through which they were falling, appeared as a gloom gray. I understood that these treasures cannot be contained or retained. They must fall through the poet who must also be like these liquid luculent treasures in order that these particular gifts may come through the poet ..continuing to transform same and all others who allow these treasures to permeate them. There is no clearer description within me to give. ... And then... I was no longer free and came back into the pain, discomfort and seemingly bloated entity within this shell.. that I call me.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 1/30/2010 9:59:00 AM
On the 26th I forgot to say what a wonderful write this was and now here it is a winner in Deborah's contest !! Congratulations!!
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Date: 1/29/2010 1:14:00 AM
Excellent writing, Robert, and well deserving of the honor in Deborah's contest. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 1/28/2010 8:04:00 AM
Congrats on your success in Debbie's contest Robert.Rgds Brian
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Date: 1/28/2010 7:27:00 AM
Robert, I missed this one too. What a very imaginative way to describe a "poet" This is truly a winner, and I congratulate your well deserved win. You are definitely one of my fav poets and this a fav poem! LUv, andrea
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Date: 1/27/2010 8:40:00 PM
Robert, your talent shines through this piece--this is like reading a glimpse into your soul--thanks for sharing...and congrats on your win with this...:)
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Date: 1/27/2010 5:51:00 PM
I missed this poem earlier....but here among the winners I can see why it made it to the top! What a gifted writer once again,....you make magic out of the unusual. Excellent...my congratulations! ~ Carrie
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Date: 1/27/2010 4:18:00 PM
Congrats Robert on your winning poem in Debbie's contest.. well deserved win for a wonderful write.. luv.. Linda-Marie..
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Date: 1/26/2010 3:34:00 PM
Interesting write here, Robert. I had to look up the word pellucid ... interesting adjective for a writer ... smile ... I love the Soup as it makes me want to stretch. Sorry about your pain ... this too shall pass ... thanks for all your recent comments on my writing. I appreciate it very much. Do I have your birth day/month? I don't need the year but I could add you to my blog calendar if I knew when it was or, have I already asked? I have C.R.S. so forgive me ... LOL ...
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Date: 1/26/2010 8:34:00 AM
Perfect...now added to my list of favorites, this is one to return to again and again, to be permeated and transformed by. May we all become such as you've described here. Such a gift...thank you Robert.
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Date: 1/26/2010 1:24:00 AM
Truly extraordinary, Robert. I love the way you juxtapose the mundane against the chimerical in such a way that the reader easily relates to both the physical and the abstract images. But the heart of your poem is where you visualize the poet being like the "liquid luculent treasures" (rich!) to be transformed by them. The same would be the case, I should think, for the readers. A grand entry to some contest, to be sure. A quick spell check and grammar beforehand so that it isn't disqualified.
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Date: 1/25/2010 9:22:00 PM
Very deep and meaningful response to the "inspiration" challenge, Robert. I love the way the glass droplets cannot be captured, but must filter through the poet to be shared as treasures with others. That last verse is a real kicker! Outstanding writing (again)! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 1/25/2010 7:04:00 PM
This kind of reminds me of an out of the body experience...(Maybe out of the poet experience) Love your poem...Marty
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Date: 1/25/2010 6:32:00 PM
Excellent work indeed,,,, Charma
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Date: 1/25/2010 6:21:00 PM
Wow, great tale, vivid and very descriptive....:JP]
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Date: 1/25/2010 5:35:00 PM
Very descriptive write I could feel the free flowing imagery coming forth with the let down to earth end. Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara
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Date: 1/25/2010 3:26:00 PM
Robert this is awesome! I hope this is an entry for the Why & How you write contest!! So beautiful and heartfelt! I Love it! Love Jeralynn
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