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For the Beginnings Matter contest by Richard Lamoreux.  I had written this as a lyric, and might have already submitted it to the originalpoetry.com website.  That site seemed to have died, and others on it had posted that they moved to poetrysoup.com.  I submitted this piece with a few of my other favorites.  That was my newest song then, and I had been working on putting music to it and recording it into my computer using Ableton Live software.  I was happy that I got a lot of positive feedback from the start with the poetrysoup community.

Carpooling in the Monday traffic jam, Wondering what we are and who I am. Since we’ve already raised a family, Is there anything left just for you and me? Seems each day is just like the one before. Exactly what have we both been working for? So many years lost from nine to five... Making ends meet, but barely feeling alive. I wanna find us some tropical getaway-- Somewhere lost where the locals play; With fishing boats and mango trees, And spicy scents carried on the breeze. I wanna find us some island Shangri-La— A quiet spot with no hoopla... Some place where it’s easy to hide, That can’t be found in a tourist guide. I wanna find us some tropical paradise Where nights are warm and folks are nice, And green birds sing exotic melodies While monkeys play high in coconut trees We could lounge in that tropical paradise, As bonfires spark like fireflies; Watch lovers dance while steel drums play Calypso tunes from dusk till day. I wanna hold you close on an empty beach, With a full moon just out of reach. We could sneak behind a big sand dune And celebrate another honeymoon. Let’s forget about all the noisy mobs, Grown-up kids, and annoying jobs, And swing in a hammock made for two— And snuggle close, just me and you. (Chorus) Bamboo torches and starry skies Will be mirrored in your big brown eyes. We’ll dance away each endless night, Lost in love, with no dawn in sight.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 6/23/2014 3:15:00 AM
Wow, This is really good, Mark. Quite a nice spot you have in your head. At least you can go whenever you want. I'll be reading a lot more of your songs. Very nice..... Robert.
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Date: 6/23/2014 3:46:00 PM
Thanks Robert. The music is kinda interesting too, sort of a blend between Polynesian and Carribean. If I ever master Ableton Live 9 I'll put it on an EP.
Date: 5/5/2014 7:05:00 PM
This kind of fantasy always reminds me of the Andy Griffith episode where Howard Sprague went and lived in a hut on an island beach. Paradise lost, you could say. :) I wish I had a sweetie and a little bird friend Tweety. To serenade us through the night. Then this sweet dream would be so right.
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Date: 4/12/2014 9:42:00 PM
Mark ... CONGRATULATIONS:) on having your poem featured on the soups HOME PAGE. <3 =LINDA
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Date: 4/12/2014 9:17:00 AM
If you hit the home button on the top left you will come to the poetry soup wall. Scroll down and you will see featured poems.
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Date: 4/9/2014 2:53:00 PM
Wonderfully written Mark. Congrats on being featured!
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Date: 4/12/2014 1:04:00 AM
Thankyou. Where is the poem featured at?
Date: 4/7/2014 6:05:00 PM
Sounds perfect. Welcome to the soup, I think you will fit in nicely. I hope you enjoy your time here, there are some great people to get to know.
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Date: 4/12/2014 1:05:00 AM
Thankyou for the comments. Several people mentioned this poem being featured. Where is that shown at?
Date: 4/7/2014 4:57:00 AM
A brilliant write. Congratulations on your poem being featured this wee, mark
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Date: 4/7/2014 1:06:00 PM
Thanks for the compliment. Where is it featured?
Date: 3/28/2014 12:46:00 PM
Mark, Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. I will find much delight, in reading and in time become familiar with your poetry. At this very moment, I will greet you with the same smile, other poets passed when I first join the soup 4 years ago. I wish you the best when it comes to your writings. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND". Hugs* SKAT
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Date: 3/28/2014 10:54:00 AM
This is a nice gateway, Mark, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you enjoy the community, as I did when I first join, March 2010. You'll find many friendly poets, who are ready to support and offer positive feedback. I want to be the first to invite you on over, to my contest and poetry page. I OFFER MY CONTEST, in hopes it inspires you to write another poem. I'm looking forward to following you and your poetry ha-ha a special pair:) here's the link to the contest page. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry_contests/ <---~Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Date: 3/28/2014 4:00:00 AM
- Warm welcome to PoetrySoup,Mark :) - I choose your first great written poem - Nice to meet you :) - Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too- PoetrySoup Rule1: Be kind and keep PoetrySoup a haven. PoetrySoup is a drama free zone(Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/27/2014 11:35:00 PM
Very nicely written. Reminds me a little of a song recorded by Bobby Goldsboro back in the sixties. The title of that song was "The Straight Life".
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Date: 3/28/2014 12:27:00 AM
Thanks. Musically it sounds like a cross between Kokomo and Margaritaville. Been working ion recording it, and it has a fun-to-play guitar part.

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