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Trick of Light

TRICK OF LIGHT Moonlight beams that streams are treacherous, dear. They shine yet leaving some lovers bewitch. I gaze at you one last time while you sleep for you might wake, tasting tears from my lips. This night, my love, please ask moonlight to stay to watch over you while I steal away. Harsh is the light that forms a beloved that in each dusk growing thin and distant. Cruel like sun's glare is the brown eyes that answers fond brilliance of another gaze. Our bittersweet love shuns: a lantern dim, Always this treachery can never be. In blessed eve, we dance again, You and I, the refuge (I felt) swells on shadows warmth these the recesses of our whispered vows-- flashes of white hope for my weary soul. I cower winter low before sin stabs. Again, this treachery can never be. Breathless in butterfly prayer for peace; a final ace for a vestige of pride. Dear,[oh dear...] though I shall steal away soon my heart will stay with you forevermore I blow this thine words up in the cold air: "May he ,who holds you today, forgives me -- for once, twice I have stolen you from him..." ___________________________________________________ ©O. E. Guillermo 01:36 pm, February 20, 2015 Sponsor: Giorgio A. V. Contest Name: Structured forms-Iambic verse - Recite and analyze a fictional event - (Top Gun Poetry) Placed 2nd.

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Julia Ward

Date: 3/12/2015 9:19:00 AM

A well-deserved win in the contest. Julia, xx

Skat A

Date: 2/27/2015 10:37:00 PM

Olive, CONGRATULATIONS, on your Win :-) ~SKAT~

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 3/5/2015 3:04:00 AM

thanks much SKat.. :O)

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 2/24/2015 1:33:00 AM

Back with a bang wid such a romantic Olive,, where hv u been dear? Lovely,, captivating last stanza,,Congrats on big win dear Olive!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 2/26/2015 9:40:00 AM

Thanks much Dr. Upma I was busy nowadays for something.. :) so been not here most of the times.. :( just now am commenting and reading as much.. :) Thanks much for the visits.. :)! do appreciate it.. but am okei. :)! God bless us all.. :)

Jan Allison

Date: 2/23/2015 7:56:00 PM

I am totally blown away by this romantic write Olive - I agree with Kim and Paul's and James's comments. I too love the final stanza - congrats in the contest:-) Hugs jan xx 7 xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 2/24/2015 8:20:00 PM

thanks much JAn.. :) so appreciate it much.. :)! hugs and hugs.. weee!

Paul Callus

Date: 2/20/2015 1:25:00 PM

Hi Olive_eloi! I just read Kim's comments...she sure nailed it! I love this romantic offering; stealing quietly away is a touching moment, and I like last stanza is a lovely ending. hugs // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 2/21/2015 7:30:00 AM

thanks much Paul.. :) I so like your comments and all others who manage to stop by and drop a comment.. :) thanks much you are boosting me to write more and more.. :D!

James Fraser

Date: 2/20/2015 4:38:00 AM

Romantic brilliance if I may say so Olive. The last stanza is romantically exceptional writing with extremely powerful loving emotions in seamless holds. Way to go girl, wonderful poetry from an ever growing poetess leaves this reader wowing for more and more, James :) ;-) :)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 2/20/2015 7:56:00 AM

thanks much James.. :)! your poems that I read draws me also to read as much as I can.. see I even wrote one or two poems that comes from your titles.. :) well the other one I didn't post here.. :D thanks much.. :)

Kp Nunez

Date: 2/20/2015 12:13:00 AM

Again Olive, you made me cry. This is such a heart-rending, soul-crushing piece...the love that can never be...The speaker was foolish enough to plunge into a relationship that was never right from the beginning, yet found the courage to face the truth and was unselfish enough to let go, accepting his sin. The beloved will never know how deep is the pain...she sleeps in sweet beguiling peace, secure in the steadfast love of another. A 7 and a fav, my dear. Hugs. Kim

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 2/20/2015 7:47:00 AM

thanks Kim.. Indeed that's what this poem entirely means.. :) adding this to your faves is wow too thanks much... :)

Njeri Hunjeri

Date: 2/19/2015 11:48:00 PM

Very romantic. Deserves a romantically colored 7!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 2/20/2015 7:40:00 AM

thanks much Njeri.. :)!