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Trembles and Thrills Contest

TREMBLES and THRILLS Contest Sponsor: Olive Eloisa Guillermo Involuntary, The ground quakes since you left me, Convulsive shaking, Shuddering and shivering, Lost my warmth inside your...cold. Vibration instinct, No peace found in my psyche, Anxious excitement, Bearings lost in your abuse, Fear...I'm lost in your mortal. Intentions made clear, Redemption, there is no more, Saddened by those eyes, Your iridescence broke me, My intense feelings broke...you. Held inside contempt, Crumbling through the sun's hot core, Forgive you, never, Collapse right in front of me, Quivering inadequate. Written: November 17, 2015 1st Place Winner

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/20/2015 12:45:00 AM

Hi Laura, awesome win. Linda

Skat A

Date: 12/19/2015 2:06:00 PM

Laura, congratulations on your nice win. SKAT

Lu Loo
Date: 12/19/2015 4:55:00 PM

Thank you:)

Jan Allison

Date: 12/19/2015 11:18:00 AM

Wow LuLoo you did a brilliant job with the one - absolutely fabulous my friend:-) hugs Jan xx

Lu Loo
Date: 12/19/2015 11:35:00 AM

Many thanks dear Jan :)-*smiles*

Eve Roper

Date: 12/19/2015 8:07:00 AM

Congratulations on your win, Laura! Hugs Eve

Lu Loo
Date: 12/19/2015 11:34:00 AM

Thank you very much lovely lady! *smiles*

Michael Tor

Date: 12/19/2015 5:47:00 AM

Laura congratulations on an excellent win!!!

Lu Loo
Date: 12/19/2015 11:31:00 AM

Many thanks Michael, you are too kind :)-*smiles*

Julia Ward

Date: 12/19/2015 3:21:00 AM

A nice Tanka win. Well done, my friend.

Lu Loo
Date: 12/19/2015 11:35:00 AM

Thank you Julia!! *smiles*

Viv Wigley

Date: 12/19/2015 2:39:00 AM

A slightly breathless, faltering pace to your Tanka, fits the mood well, Laura. Congratulations on your being the topster! Viv x

Lu Loo
Date: 12/19/2015 11:30:00 AM

Thank yo very much Viv..you are too kind :)-*smiles*

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 12/19/2015 2:21:00 AM

Laura, ***Also, you did not mention trembles and thrills, but I felt it obvious within your lines, descriptive, strong and catchy phrases: anxious excitement, no peace found in my psyche…. One of the unique entries I have… BiG CONGRATULATIONS! I thank you for your participation!~ Hugs and smiles, Olive Eloisa =`)

Lu Loo
Date: 12/19/2015 11:29:00 AM

Oh my word, thank you Olive very much for your kind words. I am humbly grateful to you for my placement. *smiles* *thanks*

Paul Callus

Date: 11/19/2015 3:36:00 PM

A unique take on this contest topic, Laura. Very expressive. A decisive and unyielding end tanka that shows no mercy:) #7 Regards // paul

Lu Loo
Date: 11/19/2015 3:39:00 PM

Thank you once again Paul :) Be blessed! -lu *smiles*

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/17/2015 3:53:00 PM

A passionate write this is! I can feel your quivering soul!! I really liked that one part: my intense feelings broke. . . you. (hat could do it for some guys!!)

Lu Loo
Date: 11/17/2015 3:56:00 PM

Thank you very much Andrea! :) -LU xxx *smiles*