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A crisp frozen winter morn so sunny bright Even with body aching agony groan Too cold for outside play gathering pine cone Th distant hills and close valley in sight Yapping of coyote sometimes is a fright Ice on the brown dead grass in the sun shown Cawing of the crows as they escape in flight With a morn like this spirit shouldn't be down When my sadden heart flows_ down on knees In earnest prayer_all my problems flown Just to be able this unburdened moment freeze To live life with all the burdens totally thrown Dream of heavenly city not this little town And of day when transported above trees

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 1/8/2011 7:59:00 AM
Hi Sara, first of all I wish you a very happy new year! Thank you for commenting "Wild Ducks". Yes I haven't bee much on Soup lately. Enjoyed much your well penned sonnet, Sara! Snow here is now melting and some areas have floods already. Here it is yet ok. After a warmer spell some more snow will come. All the best!...Gert
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Date: 1/6/2011 6:50:00 AM
Sara, you give a lucid description of the scene of nature and people in a time of retrospection. Your ending transports us to the eternal place for which the wise seek. May we live for God and be pleasing in His sight. Thanks for comments on my site. James
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Date: 1/5/2011 2:13:00 PM
yes yes..all well and good but what about poems for the rest of us Sara. you see i am not so concerned about loseing you just the poems..ha ha..don't believe it...! and what would i do for comments..
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Date: 1/5/2011 12:20:00 PM
Sara, I can truthfully say I don't have a "dark side". In order to enter the contest, I found a recent news article and vicariously placed myself in the situation of the assailant. As for this entry, it looks quite good as far as the descriptiveness and rhyming go. It looks as if it fits all the criteria for a sonnet.
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Date: 1/5/2011 10:56:00 AM
Sara - I liked the message of this poem - mj
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Date: 1/5/2011 8:48:00 AM
Hello there. Sara, I like this Sonnet lots. I have gotten away from writing form poetry. Free Verse seems to be my style now. You have so much going on in this sonnet and I love it. I really like the last two lines. I often dream of a heavenly city. It relaxes me before sleeping and gives me sweet dreams. Take care and may God keep you safe. Jancarl
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Date: 1/5/2011 4:36:00 AM
What a nice way to nurture the heavenly thoughts in this beautiful sonnet, Sara
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Date: 1/4/2011 6:53:00 PM
your writing tells me you have guts, the strength to live through your words of wisdom, from your dreams, thoughts and prayers to your poetry. i believe the heavenly city you refer to lives in our hearts, where it grows with each good deed, with each prayer, with every good intention. I enjoy your work and value you down here, with us. thanks for sharing, chuck
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Date: 1/4/2011 5:39:00 PM
a most wonderful city to dream of, sara. For all of us!! well, goodnight to you. Thnk I will get off soon. LUv, Andrea
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