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flashing red lights red and white stripes crossing the road where tracks are laid whistle so loud heard by the whole town the warning the engineer played steel wheels running on rails pushing and pulling staying on the trail clu cluck clu cluck clu cluck the heart beat of a living train mixing with the whistle and engine blair from my car i saw the cars that followed the engine of the train and started counting one by one as they whistled by and into the plain cars that carried coal everyone the same except the ones with graffiti usually some ones name there were cars that carried cars and tanks with propain boxes they could put on truck and back on trains again there were some old box cars that were empty doors slid open wide so inviting to a hobo who could just jump inside i thought about the places the bridges the train crossed the places i'd like to see before the time is lost the mountains the rivers and the plains the train crossed then i saw the Eden men thought they'd lost spread out in the places that very train crossed

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Date: 9/20/2008 6:48:00 PM
Nothing like being whisked away on a mental vacation by the steal wheels rolling down the tracks. This is very nicely written John. Thank you for commenting on my poetry also!
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Date: 9/7/2008 10:26:00 AM
Enjoyed this heart-beating, blood flowing poem, alive with sounds and views of the countryside! My brother was just yesterday talking about hopping the freights when we were kids. Times have changed but your gift of pen and ink has managed to keep another memory alive for me! I can't wait to show this poem to my brother Jack. Thanks for writing it. love, karen
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Date: 8/31/2008 4:26:00 PM
Hi John. Well wow, first of all, thanks for that incredibly kind comment. I appreciate it very much. The rhyme and flow of this poem is amazing. The message here is quite beautiful. I've always loved trains, and the imagery and whole atmosphere to the poem is extremely well expressed. I feel like I am on one, looking out in awe and wonder of our beautiful land. The continual repeating sound of the train is like a universal heartbeat. Awesome write! Love, Shar
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Date: 8/11/2008 2:57:00 AM
sound like a sad trip to me.
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Date: 8/9/2008 6:30:00 PM
Interesting perspective on trains...so many words to describe a small subject matter. Very creative.:) Regards, Sara
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Date: 8/9/2008 8:23:00 AM
John - very beautiful poem - Loved the little heartbeat of the train - the imaginary in this poem was excellent - Great Job and God Bless - Thank you for your past comments and I'm feeling better every day so I'll keep my eyes open for your writing - God Bless John
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