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Train Ride

Clickity clack, clickity clack the sound keeps coming back I remember the ride, had time to bide, as the train clattered along. We swished and swirled further beyond the burbling golden pond than I had ever been, affirmed my grin, as the train whizzed gaily along. I remember the zip and zap, then the sharp, sudden snap, my head against the seat and the fierce heat as the train swiftly zoomed along. I remember the sudden smash, the sound of booming crash, dreadful growling rail wheels, turned on their heels as the train shrieked and screeched along!

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Date: 7/31/2022 7:44:00 PM
Sounds super-scary to me... Train gonna be alright?! lol. ~ The Little Engine that Failed
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 8/1/2022 5:47:00 AM
Sadly, I think that last curve sent it sailing. LOL Linda
Date: 7/31/2022 9:21:00 AM
It sounds so scary....! Hope you escaped scathe free from the bumpy train ride. Well written with many onomatopoeic words
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 7/31/2022 9:35:00 AM
My deepest thanks for your visit and read Mala. I appreciate your positive comments! Linda
Date: 7/31/2022 8:59:00 AM
Heya Linda, hope your train ride didn’t turn into a real train wreck, it sounds pretty rough psychologically, like reliving a ghost train nightmare, an intense poem very well written, cheers David
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 7/31/2022 9:20:00 AM
You are very kind David. Thank you for the positive and encouraging remarks! Linda
Date: 7/31/2022 8:19:00 AM
Linda, a train ride from hell you have creatively expressed~hope it was only in your head.??? :)Paulette
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 7/31/2022 9:19:00 AM
All fiction Paulette! Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. Linda

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