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Totally Decayed

The dead tree still stands totally decayed Could be modern Sodom and Gomorrha Babylon that Revelation's story told The dead tree still stands totally decayed Vision of tree came to me and stayed What...is that tree ..America that I love The dead tree still stands totally decayed Could be modern Sodom and Gomorrha (Genesis 19, 1Kings 14:24, Isaiah 13:1, 14:22, Revelation 14:8, 16:19 references that could apply.)

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Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 1/16/2010 2:09:00 PM

Sara, The triolet form intrigues me. I'm glad to see you using this form because it reminds me to practice it more, too. Totally Decayed is well written and thought provoking. Thanks for sharing. Lovingly, Dane Ann

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 1/13/2010 8:56:00 AM

by 2020 there will be no females in China, what will be come of them?

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/11/2010 9:23:00 PM

wow, have you done a triolet before? It's very nice. You can put (a) in front of the word tree in line 5 since all the lines should have equal syllable count. I love how you used a deep mesage, and you have some great refrain lines here. THe refrains are what "make" the triolet! I really like this! Luv, Andrea ps. Thanks for seeing my etheree!

Audrey Haick

Date: 1/11/2010 2:23:00 PM

America is falling fast, Sara, but most of Europe is gone, they say! Many churches are empty. Great write! I have to go and study this form. Seems interesting! Peace, Audrey

Joanna Smith

Date: 1/11/2010 1:41:00 PM

i understand and i agree with you 100%. very nice

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/11/2010 12:20:00 PM

A new verse form for me, Sara, but you seem to have mastered it. And I like the analogy of America in comparison to Sodom and Gomorrha. Creative and compelling work! Love, Carolyn

P Sheart

Date: 1/11/2010 11:44:00 AM

Very interesting and thought provoking Sara. Enjoyed. You keep your faith close to your heart through your writing. Very honorable indeed. Take care sweet. Love Light Patty

Scarlett Sepulvado Anderson

Date: 1/11/2010 11:32:00 AM

I like this a lot. Thanks for helping figure out what kind of poetry I'm writing and your kind remarks. Have a great day! Scarlett