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Too Soon Departed

Slick seaweed captures her footprints. Rock jetty perils are concealed as a thick, salty shroud begins to lift. Waves’ power lures her. Above deep water she bends, chilled by spray and cool December winds, intoxicated by sea scents. The aroma carries her back, drifting to days and nights when bluefish aplenty they’d caught here. Memories of their laughter, playful, loving voices reverberate across the rocks. Tears she sheds for just four years of bliss. “Not long enough,” murmurs the young widow, a siren crooning to the waves for one more day. Lifting fog reveals a shooting star; many had stroked the black velvet heaven on romantic nights shared here. Recognizing the sign, she gently lifts the lid, disbursing his ashes, tenderly fulfilling his wish. He wanted to be one with the sea part of an eternal life they would soon share.
*Entry for Carol’s “Let Down” contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 12/2/2011 7:38:00 AM
Congrats to you for this emotive win, Carolyn..this is so sad...a real tear-jerker. Love the playful loving voices reverberating over the rocks. Gwendolen
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Date: 12/1/2011 6:05:00 PM
Carolyn a beautiful job, graciously written, life is beautifully sad on this side at times... congratulations on your worthy first place win. Agape, Moses
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Date: 12/1/2011 5:44:00 PM
This is tragically beautiful. Congratulations.
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Date: 12/1/2011 5:05:00 PM
Congratulations on your win :)
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Date: 12/1/2011 3:53:00 PM
A heartbreaking write.......congrats on your win. Hugs CC
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Date: 12/1/2011 8:55:00 AM
Just beautiful Carolyn. So heartfelt. Congratulations on your well deserved win.
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Date: 12/1/2011 8:27:00 AM
This is sad but so well done. You are a true artist Carolyn. Love, Joyce
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Date: 12/1/2011 6:30:00 AM
Congrtatulations on your placement for this very moving piecex
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Date: 12/1/2011 6:16:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement in my contest Carolyn. You all left a piece of yourselves on this contest page. It was so very hard to judge. I am asking you all to read and comment on all the winners here. You will go away seeing into the hearts of all the winners. This was a very emotional contest for me. Thank you all for supporting this contest. Love and blessing to you all, Carol
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Date: 11/22/2011 9:31:00 PM
very sad but so well pieced together here a pure winner love duncan and ceizar
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Date: 11/19/2011 3:15:00 PM
Such a sad write, my friend. Wonderful poem, though. I loved your co write with Tony - I was chuckling for ages, LOL. I remember you telling me about John and the Xmas condoms : )
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Date: 11/19/2011 7:18:00 AM
Well done! Sad but beautifully written.
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Date: 11/19/2011 2:10:00 AM
This is so sad and very well written. I felt the sad feelings in every line. You really captured the team of the contest very well. Best wishes
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Date: 11/18/2011 7:52:00 PM
PS Thanks so much for your fine review of my poem Words And Phrases. Please feel free to share it with anyone you wish. JB
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Date: 11/18/2011 7:51:00 PM
This is absolutely lovely and so bitter-sweet. A fine entry. God Bless, JB
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Date: 11/18/2011 7:03:00 PM
not crying i can tell that this poem was for me and you. here in our state of missouri we have the lake of the ozarks where april wanted her ashes scattered. i was'nt there but i was told that they were there. so i know the essence of this poem first hand. thank you for sharing. john
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