Too Hard To Breathe

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As I lie still upon this bed air too thick to breathe light too bright to see words too loud to hear limbs so heavy A legion marches with voices shrill and whistles loud through my psychotic brain Your name ripples soft sounds Your face in memories too tearful to bear Every pore of my skin remembers you In the womb I felt your fingertips on mine Wispy touches on my neck and cheek Small giggles small puffs sway my curls ticklishly I tango madness, in my embrace a cackling lunatic Who are you? Strip my wings off me let me withdraw in a cocoon destroy my voice For I remember you once walked distance killed proximity I suffocate take me instead *** August 8, 2017 Copyright © Darren White

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Patricia Cresswell

Date: 9/11/2017 11:39:00 AM

To be able to write so clearly must mean some knowledge of the topic either personally or empathetically. You appear to be highly empathetic Darren which gives Validity to your words.

Darren White
Date: 9/14/2017 1:47:00 AM

You are absolutely right. To be able to address the topic, you have to know a lot about it, or else it's plain horrible ...

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 8/12/2017 1:47:00 AM

Exquisite, by-the-way ... didn't mean to wax introspective. ;-)

Patricia Cresswell
Date: 9/11/2017 11:38:00 AM

Darren White
Date: 8/12/2017 1:56:00 AM

;-)

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 8/12/2017 1:46:00 AM

Love this, D, and I'm sure you know why. One of these days I'm going to write a poem about how my writing "dark" poetry is about catharsis and healing and NOT about my being suicidal or depressed ... the problem is THAT poem will most likely be interpreted as something that it ISN'T, lol. How oft time people take my ambiguity as literal, and MORE common, take my precise words as metaphor, ha! Oh, well ... it's fun both ways, but I love writing darkly MORE every time I do it, so here comes more!

Darren White
Date: 8/12/2017 1:56:00 AM

I write mostly metaphorical, only sometimes literal, and when I do, I announce it :)

Darren White
Date: 8/12/2017 1:54:00 AM

There have been written essays, books, and there have been heated discussions about how literature and ESPECIALLY poetry is mostly mistaken as the poet's personal very deep emotional writing, and often cries for help or whatnot.

Darren White
Date: 8/12/2017 1:54:00 AM

Although I will not deny it can be all that, it can be cathartic, can be very liberating to write away personal feelings, it is also very dangerous to assume that everything written by a poet, is also an immediate feeling/experience, rather than something the poet can relate to and write about, after all poets are a sensitive kind of people who write about most anything...

Maria Williams

Date: 8/12/2017 1:00:00 AM

Darren I know from your remarks below that this is not about you. You are a brilliant poet, and are able to capture the scene so well, time and time again. Brilliant work my young friend...Maria

Darren White
Date: 8/12/2017 1:57:00 AM

Thanks Maria, very happy with that :)