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Too Fast For Me

For every step my father took, my short legs took three. “Daddy, please,” I called to him, “you walk too fast for me.” My sister took a husband; my brother went to sea. Our father sighed, “Our family time has been too brief for me.” As my teen years ended and college lay before me, Dad shook his head in sadness, “It’s all too fast for me.” When Mama died, we reminisced their forty-seven years. The passing time, the life they shared were captured in our tears. And as computers came of age, Dad watched me surf the net. “I’d like to learn,” he said to me, “But I’m not ready yet.” Then as Dad lay dying, carrying years that numbered ninety-three, I could not help but say aloud, “They went too fast for me.” * I wrote this poem on the way to my father’s funeral. I wanted to read it aloud as a tribute, but my sister said the rhyme made it sound too amateurish. She has her PhD in Literature, so I didn’t argue. I should have.

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Date: 11/16/2014 6:08:00 PM
Yes....agreed with all below, Carolyn....this is a poem deeply communicating to the reader...jmg
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Date: 10/27/2014 12:29:00 AM
Indeed, too much learning can make one mad. I don't find your words and rhyme amateurish. Who can deny and silence words from the heart. Mike and the Mechanics' song "In the Living Years," speaks of the regret of words unspoken. This poem teared me up.
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Date: 10/26/2014 5:48:00 AM
This is an amazing tribute to your father. I am sure he hears it everytime somone reads it. My problem with those who hold degrees in literature is that they forget the value of the poem from the heart. Anyone can be trained to write. Talent is God given and can never be taught. You are a talented poet.
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Date: 10/23/2014 1:29:00 PM
I can sense your grief very clearly and know what you were going through. You should have read this poem aloud.
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Date: 10/22/2014 1:12:00 PM
ah such a heart touching deep beautiful pen carlyon truly bless you
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Date: 10/22/2014 10:49:00 AM
Dear Carolyn... Heart trumps arrogant education! I love the tribute to your dad! Have it written in calligraphy and framed! 7x7 Hugs, chuck
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Date: 10/22/2014 9:57:00 AM
So sweet a poem Carolyn. What can be more valuable tribute to a father than his daughter's poem. Regards to your demised father. He was a wonderful man beyond doubt. HUGS!--------Rajat
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Date: 10/21/2014 6:51:00 PM
DANG it, you let your sister say that?? OH MY, this was SO GOOD. THis is what people want to hear. NOt some high brow "literature" at the funeral of a man who likely was as down to earth as this poem is. I love this, Carolyn.
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Date: 10/21/2014 4:41:00 PM
Good one..You will always have it to cherish and I am sure that your dad knows of your gift..Thanks for the visit to my page..My mother became the best cook even when times were hard and they were for them for a very long time (meaning inadequate ingredients but she always managed to make things taste and look good with limited resources)..Sara
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Date: 10/21/2014 3:55:00 PM
Great. stuff, Carolyn. At 85 I feel the same way. Where did all the years go? They went fast! Love, daver
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Date: 10/21/2014 3:05:00 PM
This is not amateurish at all, Carolyn; the feelings you transmit in these lines have the ability to touch the heart...the fast passage of time and the reminder of what could have been said and done will always remain with us. hugs // paul
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 10/21/2014 3:10:00 PM
I was very blue when I wrote it, Paul. Free verse would have pleased my sister more then, but she now accepts that I work in many forms. I plan to share our co-writes with her when I see her next month.
Date: 10/21/2014 2:47:00 PM
I have to disagree with your sister, tributes are from the heart how well they are written is irrelevant, sometimes brains can overwhelm common sense.. no offense my poetic friend..just my thoughts
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 10/21/2014 2:55:00 PM
No offense taken, Frederic. It DID come from the heart and I probably would have felt better had I read it at the funeral.
Date: 10/21/2014 2:37:00 PM
Yes, how time passes through its way we can't feel but after its passing we see changes in everything and in every being. Genius philosophy depicted practically beautifully. Loved always, my lovely friend,bl
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Bl Devnath
Date: 10/21/2014 3:01:00 PM
You have rightly said with beautiful words. Loved always, my lovely friend,bl
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 10/21/2014 2:56:00 PM
Dear BL, each day seems to pass faster than the last one. I was told this is because the longer we live, the smaller the fraction one day of our lives is. Even years spin past now and sometimes it's hard to live in the present.
Date: 10/21/2014 2:27:00 PM
You should always try and follow your heart Carolyn - it is written with love from a wonderful daughter and is an amazing tribute. You have inspired me - I intend to write one for my father:-( Hugs Jan xxx
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 10/21/2014 2:34:00 PM
Inspiring others is the best any writer can hope to achieve. Thank you, Jan.
Date: 10/21/2014 2:26:00 PM
Yes you should of. This is so beautiful Carolyn. The good thing is your father knew you wrote it. The years go to fast every time we fall in love with anyone. Your poem brings out emotions we can all feel in our hearts and I thank you for sharing this with us.
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 10/21/2014 2:35:00 PM
Sweet Brenda, you have a beautiful heart. Thanks for understanding and relating to these emotions. It took a while, but my sister and I have mended our relationship. She's kinder and gentler now.
Date: 10/21/2014 2:16:00 PM
Maybe you should have. Oh my dear friend Carol, so really sorry about your daddy, your loss. I love your poem, and it's so nice and sweet and have to disagree with your sis. Your sisters opinion is hers but you have yours too and much important like hers, diplomats, degrees or whatever she may have.hey your daddy must know you wrote this for himand must be proud of you and smiling at youfrom heaven. :) Love and lots of hugs from me to you! Take care! xxx D.
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 10/21/2014 2:38:00 PM
Thank you, Dorian. I just read your poem about Jack the mouse and still have a grin on my face. That's one of the funniest poems I've ever read!!
Date: 10/21/2014 2:12:00 PM
It is beautiful Carolyn...My condolences....hugs and love Tim
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 10/21/2014 2:40:00 PM
It was five years ago, Tim. Dad had a beautiful soul and a deep, soothing voice. There are many things about him that I miss and his sense of humor is at the top of the list.

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