Today

Today it's raining Today my heart is breaking Today I don't smile

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Roberthenry Poulin

Date: 8/18/2013 12:50:00 PM

Today I love your Senryu of the decending emotions with the rain, your heart broken and all together you don't care to smile. I have never seen suchness of three same words in the three lines of a haiku. I can see you in all the misery your little poem states standing in the rain sad from something that made you sad and you have no intention to smile, yet maybe cry. Nicely done, I felt the emotions. That is what a haiku and Senryu or tanka or korean Sijo must do. Good Job: Robert Henry Poulin

Kayla Obrien
Date: 8/18/2013 4:30:00 PM

Thank you for your positive feedback :-) I appreciate it.

Poet Tacito

Date: 8/8/2013 11:27:00 AM

May tomorrow shine. Nicely done.

Kayla Obrien
Date: 8/8/2013 1:05:00 PM

Very much appreciated :-)