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Time In Slow Motion

From the parlor window, an old woman looks beyond the decrepit wooden rails of the low fence Five Rhode Island Reds are grazing around in tall brown grass hunting grasshoppers, and she welcomes the company One cock sits perched on a post, in the shade of an elm keeping watch Down the deserted asphalt road, heat waves blur the horizon A dusty whirlwind has picked up a tumbleweed And spins it against nearby barbed wire that surrounds the coop The sound of the windmill moans a painful whine She looks with empty eyes, at the room around her, An old clock ticks away the minutes in slow motion The mantel displays photographs of a life she hardly recalls She lays her hand on the desk, picks up the phone that never rings and carefully listens to the dial tone Then, she will once again turn toward the window that needs a good scrubbing, where her gaze curves down the gravel driveway, toward someone not coming

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 8/14/2010 9:08:00 AM
Congratulations Carrie on your win in Nikko Palmario's contest "Twist and SHOCK" Love, Carol
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Date: 8/13/2010 4:33:00 PM
Congratulations on your big win with this very moving poem Carrie. Loneliness is beautifully conveyed in this creative piece. Aloha, Connie
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Date: 8/10/2010 9:52:00 PM
Congratulations, Carrie top form as always! LUv, Andrea
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Date: 8/10/2010 7:41:00 PM
Congratulations, Carrie, on a beautiful poem. Enjoy! Agape, Moses
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Date: 8/9/2010 7:21:00 AM
Congratulations Carrie on your win in Paula Swanson's contest "Ding-A-Ling". Love, Carol
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Date: 8/8/2010 5:42:00 PM
Such a unique original take on the topic I would expect no less from you...so far for me you are number one (shhooosh!) Light & Love
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Date: 8/8/2010 8:12:00 AM
It's a delight to read this fine poetry again Carrie. Many congratulations on your win in Nikko's fine contest >> James
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Date: 8/7/2010 9:40:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Carrie
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Date: 8/7/2010 12:08:00 PM
Congrats Carrie on your winning poem in the Twist and Shock contest with this exceptional write.. enjoy another sweet victory today..with luv..
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Date: 8/7/2010 11:37:00 AM
The way you put your words together and make them flow never ceases to amaze me, Carrie!...I usually pick out a favorite phrase or line when I comment on your stuff but in this case? Too many to mention! I am at a complete loss when it comes to this form...maybe you could tutor me sometime?...Congratulations as always! - Tim
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Date: 8/7/2010 9:48:00 AM
Hi Carrie :) Congrats on your win in my contest-- this was just so beautifully written and that twist of waiting for somebody who's not coming was just so sad-- nikko :)
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Date: 8/7/2010 9:21:00 AM
congrats on your win with this awesome entry
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Date: 8/7/2010 1:59:00 AM
A very emotional scene that pulls at the heart-strings, Carrie. Congratulaton on you BIG WN. love, Lainie
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Date: 8/6/2010 8:46:00 AM
Congrats Carrie on your big win in Paula's contest with another magnificent write.. enjoy your win and happy weekend..with luv..
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Date: 12/26/2009 12:15:00 PM
just what i needed for my christmas to be compleate. congrads on your placement. sad is'nt it? John H Loving III
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Date: 12/21/2009 11:07:00 PM
Dear Carrie, Congratulations on both sensational entries making it through the first round and best wishes on advancing to the finals. Lainie
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Date: 12/21/2009 4:55:00 PM
boy do I hear you. BUT such "ripe" discription I love it..so rich and full of life even if the heroine only experiences it subconsciuosly..she shows us the life she is submerged in. Light & Love
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Date: 12/21/2009 9:54:00 AM
What a sad tale! Congrats on your first round win Carrie
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Date: 12/21/2009 9:45:00 AM
Carrie my friend,Congrats on your poems winning the first round of PS contest!! Very well deserved, enjoyed reading your wonderful poetry. Here’s wishing you a very Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year!! May 2010 be your best year ever! Love Light Patty
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Date: 12/21/2009 12:49:00 AM
Congrats on your first round contest success Carrie.Rgds Brian
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Date: 12/20/2009 11:34:00 AM
this tears at your heart...congrats on getting to the second round. Well done! BG
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Date: 12/20/2009 11:28:00 AM
Many congratulations on reaching the second round with your fine poem Carrie >> James
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Date: 7/28/2009 10:14:00 PM
I love the imagery...very good piece
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Date: 7/26/2009 4:04:00 PM
Awesome atmosphere you have captured here, very sad and poignant. well written and a pleasure to read. Well done. Love Heidie
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Date: 7/26/2009 3:09:00 PM
This is great poetry. You capture something as a painter does. I like the lay-out of this poem because it gives the feeling of descent that adds so much to the narrative. The narrative carries itself well and I like the way that you have dominant vowel sounds in each stanza allowing the reader to feel the narrative as well as read it.
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