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Through the Dust

She drew her finger slowly through the dust The dust of all those years and yesterdays Tears in submission to times gone by Echoes of laughter came tumbling back The dust of all those years and yesterdays Wrapped now in the cloak of memories Echoes of laughter came tumbling back Searching for her childhood in this room Wrapped now in the cloak of memories Tears in submission to time gone by Searching for her childhood in this room She drew her finger slowly through the dust

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/2/2015 8:00:00 AM

You have a unique way of expressing yourself, I enjoy it.

Constance La France

Date: 3/20/2015 4:28:00 PM

Barbara, congratulations on your win with this wonderful and emotional poem, it is sadly beautiful, a perfect 7 . . .

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/19/2015 4:06:00 PM

Congrats on your winning ..Sara

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/19/2015 11:23:00 AM

Congrats.. PD

Emmanuel Brian Oule

Date: 3/19/2015 10:43:00 AM

wow, congs, Dam well written Bryan

Tammy Reams

Date: 3/19/2015 9:22:00 AM

Congrats on your win. Strong memories of child hood.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/18/2015 7:26:00 PM

way to do a pantoum. BIG congrats for your win.

Robert Lindley

Date: 3/16/2015 10:29:00 PM

Fantastic poem my friend. Touched me as I read it. Looking back can be a great thing but at times it does bring the tears. A7 and adding this jewel to my fav list....

Mark Trichet

Date: 3/16/2015 6:55:00 PM

The magic of poetry. I loved this Barbara, you have a special pen. Congrats to you

Tim Smith

Date: 3/16/2015 6:47:00 PM

Stopping back with congratulations...hugs Tim

Eve Roper

Date: 3/16/2015 11:26:00 AM

Excellent verse, Barbara, congratulations on your fantastic win. Blessings Eve

Barbara Gorelick
Date: 3/16/2015 11:31:00 AM

Thank you Eve, one never knows how it will turn out..lol. Thank you for your support...Barbara

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/16/2015 8:19:00 AM

Such nostalgia portrayed in your poem, Barbara. I felt the emotion in your wonderfully written poem. My heartfelt congratulations to your for your First Place win. Sandra

Barbara Gorelick
Date: 3/16/2015 11:33:00 AM

I'm glad you stopped by, thank you so much. Im so pleased with my placement.. its been awhile. lol. Barbara

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/15/2015 7:33:00 PM

We are of an age where this happens daily [sigh] Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Barbara Gorelick
Date: 3/15/2015 9:10:00 PM

Thanks Deb...Yes, age has many challenges, many of them in dealing with memories..BG

Laura Leiser

Date: 3/15/2015 6:50:00 PM

What an excellent poem in the pantoum form, which I have yet to try. Congrats on your well deserved win, Barbara! :)

Barbara Gorelick
Date: 3/15/2015 9:11:00 PM

thank you Laura, I glad you liked it and stopped by..It was a complete surprise. Barbara

Skat A

Date: 3/15/2015 3:31:00 PM

Barbara, CONGRATULATIONS, on your Win ~SKAT~

Joseph May

Date: 3/15/2015 3:08:00 PM

Great write and win BG...congrats

Carrie Richards

Date: 3/15/2015 1:27:00 PM

Oh, I love this, Barbara !! Well deserved congrats to my California neighbor! The tender nostalgia will always capture my heart...a lovely little phantoum that is a keeper!

Barbara Gorelick
Date: 3/15/2015 2:18:00 PM

Thank you! We must find a way to have coffee sometime..we are not that far apart. Barbar

Theresa Stephens

Date: 3/15/2015 12:28:00 PM

My childhood home, now long gone, does live in my memories, even down to dust motes, I once observed, lit up by a sunbeam which streaked across the room when I was 6 years old. You have captured such an image in your excellent winning poem. Congrats, Theresa xx

John Lawless

Date: 3/15/2015 11:32:00 AM

Barbara, this one hit it out of the park, for me at least. The Phantoum form, the content, style and cadence. Way to go. I'd give this a Boston "AWESOME WICKED PISSAH" RATING. Thanks for playing in the soup.

Barbara Gorelick
Date: 3/15/2015 2:18:00 PM

Thank you John...I am honored and delighted. Love your comment..I'm laughing...Barbara

Jan Allison

Date: 3/15/2015 11:23:00 AM

Dropping back with my congrats Barbara:-) Hugs jan xx

Barbara Gorelick
Date: 3/15/2015 2:19:00 PM

thank you Jan..I so appreciate your support. BG

Tim Smith

Date: 2/24/2015 11:33:00 PM

The memories are priceless but that Father Time has to ruin everything..... Hugs Tim

David Meade

Date: 2/24/2015 8:23:00 PM

Looking back to our childhood -- where did it go! The house and rooms are so much smaller than I remembered . . . Your poem awoke some sleeping memories . . . how fast time does go!

Jan Allison

Date: 2/24/2015 6:56:00 PM

wonderful memories - I love the form you have chosen for this poem Barbara - never attempted it myself - good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 2/24/2015 8:03:00 PM

I have just posted my poem - we all have such a unique take on this theme:-) Hugs jan xxx

Barbara Gorelick
Date: 2/24/2015 8:01:00 PM

Thank you Jan..you are always so supportive and I appreciate it. Barbara