Thirst

sun spitting fire hankering to be moistened, the Earth gapes its mouth dried up hearts thirst for love’s balm that evaporates like steam. Traditional Tanka with the rhyme scheme 5-7-5-7-7 Placed First A Brian Strand Tanka Contest

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/19/2022 4:04:00 PM

This is really amazing both in imagery AND meaning. One of my favorites on the winner list. Congrats to you

Jcb Brul

Date: 2/19/2022 2:05:00 PM

Back with congratulations. Excellent tanka. A joy to be read again and again.

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 2/19/2022 8:33:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A perfect Tanka with such a unique theme! Love ~ Mala

Jcb Brul

Date: 1/31/2022 2:41:00 PM

Perfect!!! My kind of tanka. Your pen never fails.

Anil Deo

Date: 1/25/2022 8:55:00 PM

So much truth, so much feeling! Shalom shalom Sis

Rico Leffanta

Date: 1/25/2022 10:31:00 AM

Desert people do not understand why the powers that be do not re-distribute shrinking ice bergs where they can cool and nourish the earth. Perhaps your tanka will enlighten? Aloha!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/25/2022 5:52:00 AM

Aptly descriptive: Hankering to be moistened, The Earth gapes its mouth... So well written, Valsa.

Sotto Poet

Date: 1/25/2022 4:47:00 AM

Work that is both descriptive and expressive is excellent. Nothing is more unpleasant than being thirsty and experiencing that awful dry sensation in your mouth.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/25/2022 3:15:00 AM

Good work that is descriptive and expressive. Reads like a good contender in the contest. Way to go. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara

Valsa George
Date: 1/25/2022 4:24:00 AM

Thanks a lot Sara for your gracious comment !

Tom Cunningham

Date: 1/25/2022 2:40:00 AM

Nothing worse than being thirsty, that horrible dry feeling you get in your mouth. Tom

Valsa George
Date: 1/25/2022 4:23:00 AM

And to a thirsty man, a glass of water is elixir ! Thanks a lot Tom.

Buhagiar Victor

Date: 1/25/2022 1:19:00 AM

Lovely Tanka, dear Valsa. I never posted a Tanka in my life. I believe I wrote one in four stanzas but not in rhyme. Your poem is so lovely but rhyme is difficult for me. Blessings.

Valsa George
Date: 1/25/2022 1:39:00 AM

Thanks a lot Victor for your sweet Comment ! I too am experimenting with new forms !