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There Is a Brighter Side

A sheepdog who was really quite confused not sure how to herd or just what to do first day on the job surrounded by a mob of sheep who felt the same way too, He'd run one way the sheep the other till they swarmed upon him like a cover they stood on his feet he said ouch, oh bleat feeling like he was going to smother, Squashed like he was in a sardine can he poked his head out wanting a new plan, he barked I quit give me kibbles and bits this sheepdog's about to go on the lam! 1-6-18 Poem for picture #3

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Jan Allison

Date: 1/29/2018 5:35:00 PM

great humour Che:-) many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 1/29/2018 9:18:00 PM

Thanks so much for very kind congrats and visit Jan; Appreciate it!~hugs Che xx

Line Gauthier

Date: 1/29/2018 2:14:00 PM

Very adorable, Cheryl. Congrats on your first place finish.

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 1/29/2018 9:17:00 PM

Thank you so much for very kind congrats and visit Line; Appreciate it!~Che :)

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 1/29/2018 10:19:00 AM

Woohoo! Congratulations on your splendid win! I love this one :) xomo!

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 1/29/2018 8:44:00 PM

Thanks so much for very kind congrats and visit Mo; Appreciate it!~Che xo

Mick Talbot

Date: 1/29/2018 9:41:00 AM

Congratulations Cheryl, a fun limerick!

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 1/29/2018 8:44:00 PM

Thanks so much for very kind congrats and visit Mick; Appreciate it!~Che :)

Eve Roper

Date: 1/28/2018 9:12:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Cheryle, you captured the "scene" I was looking for. Hugs Eve ~`*

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 1/29/2018 8:22:00 AM

Thanks so much for kind congrats and visit Eve; this is a rarity for me! I really enjoyed writing this poem; thanks so much again!~hugs Che :)PS Will check it out

Tom Cunningham

Date: 1/28/2018 8:50:00 PM

Brilliant Cheryl, congratulations. Regards Tom

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 1/29/2018 8:19:00 AM

Thank you so much for kind congrats and visit Tom; this is a rarity for me! Appreciate it~Che :)

Pat Adams

Date: 1/11/2018 4:49:00 PM

The sheepdog is going on the lam! Very clever word play. You know I am a fan!!! Another good one by you!!

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 1/11/2018 7:53:00 PM

Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Pat; glad you liked it!~Che :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/9/2018 3:05:00 PM

very cute!!! go on the lam. I have a limerick using that word play too, but in a totally different way!!

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 1/9/2018 8:23:00 PM

Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Andrea; Appreciate it! (love word play too!)~Che :)

Susan Ashley

Date: 1/7/2018 8:22:00 PM

Lol! Oh this is an awesome write Cheryl. I adore the content and your title is perfect. Wonderful story telling with great rhythm and rhyme. (please check line 6, I think you may have meant 'then' instead of 'them') A fantastic piece. Best wishes for a win my friend. ~Susan

Susan Ashley
Date: 1/8/2018 12:36:00 PM

Oh yes, Cheryl, I totally see what you were saying now with 'them the other'.. however your revision is perfect :)

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 1/8/2018 8:18:00 AM

I fixed line six because "them the other" does sound out of place although I intended "them" to mean the sheep…thanks Susan! Thanks for very kind comment and encouragement too my friend~Che :)

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 1/6/2018 9:59:00 PM

Lol! I bleating love it ;P

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 1/7/2018 8:04:00 AM

Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Mo; glad you got chuckle out of it!~Che :)

Arturo Michael

Date: 1/6/2018 8:03:00 PM

Wonderful how you thought this sheepdog might have felt on his first day on the job...and from your poem...I'm sure he felt so too...

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 1/6/2018 8:38:00 PM

Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Arturo; appreciate the stop by!~Che :)