Their Feet

To my sons His feet Lead him to breech Any borders and seek To meet his brothers as equals Steven. His feet Lead him to leap Over walls and land on his feet Andrew His feet Seek to be free To reach the top of trees And fly to where dares the eagle Matthew. By CarolineCecile

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Matthew Anish

Date: 5/12/2011 6:37:00 AM

Reminds me of my young nephew - who is on the track team at Wesleyan. I like the form of cinquain and you use it well. Peace & blessings Matthew Anish

Desiree M

Date: 5/12/2011 12:13:00 AM

A very well crafted cinquain. Children's feet always do interesting things indeed ;) Love this poem

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/9/2011 8:47:00 AM

I love the way you describe your sons, their different approaches to life and the wishes you hold for each of them. They all sound wonderful, Caroline, but I think I would admire Steven the most if he is able to see all people as equals. Very much enjoyed your poem. I will keep you posted and let you know something after I see the new podiatrist tomorrow. Love, Carolyn

Cory Long

Date: 5/9/2011 7:22:00 AM

this is very nice good job with it and it has a great flow.. cory

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/9/2011 7:18:00 AM

This makes me smile, and think of my own sons...the younger always striving to keep up with the older... A sweet and touching poem of brothers! ;)

Caroline Cécile Delacroix

Date: 5/9/2011 7:01:00 AM

Oh, Dr.Ram Mehta, my sons are no longer toddlers! :) Steven's 20, Andrew's 18, Matthew's 11. Thanks though for the comments.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/9/2011 6:06:00 AM

Nice write on the mother's day enjoying the bliss with the toddlers, I enjoyed the rhythm, Caroline

Don Johnson

Date: 5/8/2011 10:27:00 PM

Yes Caroline-Cecile Great Verse lovely Wandering feet we have sets of 3 with wanderlust to find a way sounds like a handfull xo Don

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/8/2011 9:46:00 PM

what a very interesting way to write of one's sons. Almost Biblical sounding, Caroline. Very nice.

Sarah Seraphin

Date: 5/8/2011 9:03:00 PM

* “Steven * Andrew * & * Matthew * Beautiful Names * With Beautiful Qualities * Beautiful CarolineCecile” * aside from loving this blessing for others of a poem * knowing that joy and pride must fill * “Your Lovely Heart” * i was planning upon visiting with * “Your Beautiful Verse” * just the other day yet became side tracked so * tis good to behold this sweeetness of * “Your Radiant Faith Filled Glow Again” * hugs and kisses * kisses and hugs * sarah