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Their Chorus of Pleasure

watching fascinated, the tree overwhelmed by multitude of birds close together as though rehearsing moves for an aerial display ..... their fluorescent plumage shining brilliantly in the near dusk light, twittering gets louder, with graceful move they lift enmass into the sky in flight, the murmuration has nothing to prove never to forget, graceful as one, they twist, twirl looping .... fine display ... no conductor to lead them in their chorus of pleasure.
penned 12/08/2016 contest: It takes four. Crystalline - 2 lines of 8/9 syllables or 9/8 syllables, unrhymed. I used 8/9. Kimo - 3 lines 10/7/6 syllables, unrhymed Quatrain - 4 lines, line 2 and 4 rhyme, lines with similar number of syllables Tanka - 5 lines, 5/7/5/7/7 syllables,

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Date: 8/24/2016 4:33:00 PM
A fantastic write, Seren! I have seen these birds, starlings I believe, fly and it is magical how in sync they are. Congrats on your 1st place win! Blessings!
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Date: 8/23/2016 1:21:00 PM
Wonderfully written..Congrats on your superb win.....
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Date: 8/23/2016 10:42:00 AM
Seren, congratulations on your win Hugs Eve
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Date: 8/22/2016 1:06:00 PM
Seren, congratulations on your win in my contest with this beautiful poem ~
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Date: 8/22/2016 12:27:00 PM
A winning effort this "chorus of Pleasure, congratulations Seren...
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Date: 8/22/2016 12:19:00 PM
Seren, lovely poem....congrats on your well deserved top placement :)-luloo
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Date: 8/21/2016 11:45:00 PM
Hi Seren, Congratulations on your win:-) Alexis
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Date: 8/21/2016 6:35:00 PM
Excellent description of our ancient, colorful bird companions as they speak and aerially commute from dusk to twilight. Congrats! :-)
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Date: 8/13/2016 9:00:00 PM
Very beautiful, like a painting.
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Seren Roberts
Date: 8/15/2016 12:55:00 AM
poetry in motion I guess......Seren
Date: 8/13/2016 4:26:00 PM
I truly enjoyed your entry, Seren - it is unique and simply dances ... CayCay
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Seren Roberts
Date: 8/15/2016 12:55:00 AM
Hi CayCay thanks for reading and commenting...Seren

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