The Works

Though there's a change in circs Still the same whenever we unifi With exchanged smiles and smirks It would seem between her and l Whenever that image then lurks It's that thought again of oh my My heart strings tugs and jerks Emotions are on an all time high And both uncontrollable quirks There's this twinkle in her eye That feeling when fireworks And supernovas fill the skie An extension of poem so sweet

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Nancy Kaufman

Date: 3/25/2023 6:08:00 PM

I forget what this rhyme scheme is called but this is a wonderful descriptive write. Enjoyed it. Nancy

David Scott
Date: 7/18/2023 10:10:00 AM

did want to rework this like others think the form is called abab im told i have at least another 58 in this pattern i wrote over last three years pandemic keeping head bizzy taking bits from old writes extending on those bits

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 12/6/2022 12:33:00 PM

Love this gorgeous piece. Sounds like a magnetic connection. Those last lines are so beautiful! Amazing work, David! Always, Laura

David Scott
Date: 3/2/2023 9:57:00 AM

not been on here for a while want to update this peace reedit bit like others got a whole barrage of poems need reworking just so much going on at moment feeling connected that would be nice only ever experienced once thankyou are for kind words xx

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 2/12/2022 9:50:00 PM

I love the beautiful imagery of this terrific poem. So electrifying! :)

Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 2/13/2022 3:42:00 PM

You are quite welcome. It's great to have you back on the soup. I think you have done very well with this poem. The entire poem has got to be amazing! xx

David Scott
Date: 2/13/2022 11:57:00 AM

Thank you for your kindness and words not been on soup for while not as often as used to be l was trying to be more poetic but create a picture of these feelings emotions like lve done with a few others this was only one verse from an old poem called sensual enjoyments just tryed to add too xx