The Waning of Dreams

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Written with my young cousin Brandon, who posts amazing snippets of prose or free verse on Facebook.

This is one of them that I reworked into a poem.

And those were the times of our lives, the late nights and restless dives... Hope given one shot at a time, a nickel a tale, a lie for a dime. And those were our lives of the times, a charade with partners in crime, the fading of twilight's last beams as we watch the waning of dreams... © Brandon Watson and Roy Jerden July 6, 2015

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Robert Johnson

Date: 8/12/2015 9:14:00 PM

As we wax nostalgic the clock continues to tick. With less of the dream to fulfill. Love the collaboration guy's.

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/22/2015 10:14:00 PM

Love this great write. When looking back on youth I see similiar, great times, many mistakes but a life full and well lived. A super 7 on this my friend. Congrats to both authors,.

Mark Peterson

Date: 7/12/2015 8:24:00 AM

Alas, in life what ought to sustain us, instead bears witness to our demise. This poem certainly prompted reflection, as only well written lines can promote.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/7/2015 12:51:00 PM

A wonderful collaboration! The waning of dreams...great line and perfect title.

Casarah Nance

Date: 7/6/2015 9:03:00 PM

I love it! a nickel a tale, a lie for a dime...great stuff both of you !

Jan Allison

Date: 7/6/2015 2:27:00 PM

Fabulous collaboration Roy i particularly loved the final couplet -get Brandon to join here and post more of his ideas:-) hugs Jan xx7