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The Vortex

Closer and closer to the vortex I spin wildly, madly So out of control Body and soul Clutching at anything and everything Knowing I’m being suctioned My breathing quickens My pulse thickens My body weakens The vortex draws me nearer to its core Turbulent Strong OH... SO...STRONG It pulls me down It sucks me in Going down Down Down I’m being devoured Swallowed up whole In the vortex Of your desire Your swirling liquid fire ~ h ~ T ~ ~ e vor you ~ ~ te of ~ ~ x Eileen Manassian Eileen

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Casarah Nance

Date: 6/23/2016 8:59:00 AM

What a ride through the swirl, this is a creative and powerful write. :)

Paul Callus

Date: 10/3/2014 9:30:00 AM

Did this happen on your way out, all made up and dressed to kill? So hot he could not resist...time was not on your side....but...the vortex was too strong...Oh! what the heck!! Let them wait!!:) // paul

Robert Ludden

Date: 9/30/2014 10:47:00 AM

very clever! A written onomotopoeia..artfully assembled for us

Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/30/2014 10:48:00 AM

Thank you, Robert. Always good to have a visit from you.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/29/2014 3:27:00 PM

HOT and SEXY. You go, girl!!! a very clever poem of love.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/30/2014 10:48:00 AM

Hot and sexy is nice. Thanks, Andrea! Hugs

Gary Bateman

Date: 9/28/2014 7:37:00 AM

Eileen, A most wonderful and compelling write!! Your words carried me on in an obvious swirl to the end. This one's a definite "7" in my book!! Enjoyed it immensely!!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/28/2014 10:45:00 AM

I'm honored, Gary. Thank you for the lovely post.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 9/28/2014 4:59:00 AM

Love ur write really Eileen! Unique ideas n expression r impressive ! Great great great!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/28/2014 6:09:00 AM

Thank you, Dr Upma....Sometimes our hearts just get out of hand! :) This crazy feeling......is sometimes nice.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/28/2014 3:17:00 AM

You took me along with you on this turbulent journey....Loved your special ending Eileen! hugs, Connie

Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/28/2014 6:10:00 AM

CONNIE! So good to see you again! :) Thanks for the visit. The ending....was trying to get that whirlpool effect. Hope it worked out. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/28/2014 2:45:00 AM

This is so cool, I love how creative you are. Good night Eileen.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/28/2014 6:10:00 AM

Sweet dreams, Richard. See you in a couple of hours. :)

Ken Carroll

Date: 9/27/2014 7:36:00 PM

Creative and explosive Eileen..

Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/28/2014 6:12:00 AM

Thank you, Ken.... Will swing by to read one of yours soon! :)

Tim Smith

Date: 9/27/2014 5:28:00 PM

Yes that is a vortex I would like to be swallowed up in as well...hugs Tim

Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/28/2014 6:13:00 AM

Wouldn't that be just superb! :) Hope all is well with you, Tim. Hugs

Justin Bordner

Date: 9/27/2014 5:20:00 PM

Mmmmmmm.....lost in a luscious immersion in heated hesitation, a swirling maelstrom of orgasmic vortex, irresitable vortex...you've got my quill movin with this jewel of inescable ecstacy Eileen. Love how creatively passionate your poem's structure is woman! J.A.B.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/28/2014 6:15:00 AM

I love being called WOMAN! :) I love being a woman, Justin...There is something so delicate and soft and pretty about women, but also this strength and wild fierceness when the mood is right. Woman...completion of man! Splendid. :) Heated hesitation can drive someone insane...I tried to capture that here. I'm glad you love my work, Justin. The feeling is mutual.