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knock knock knock on my front door i get up to look it's lonliness at the door but quite and still i would not let lonliness in so peacefull i slept morning came and with the knocks once more but i kept my temper and evened the score inside i sat quietly wishing he'd go away but he yelled from outside he had something to say i said "go away" and i put a record on something moving and grooving i played it all day long but when evening came i put on a sweater and decided to play something much better something smooth something sentimental something with lyrics that are very gentile something with words that don't dare remind of terrible incidences recently left behind constantly reminding me it should be a crime! it should be a crime!! it should be a crime!!! anger was present he had a key i was glad to see him and he was glad to see me but lonliness though being out side made his presence known in certian shadows in certian rooms anger said "have a drink" and handed me a bottle "listen up. i know how to fix that flirt. slap her in the face. rub her name in the dirt!" and with this my imagination ran wild drink after drink we talked a while but i remembered myself this wasn't my style and once again lonliness knocked at the door i let him in and fell crying to the floor why, oh why must you visit once more?! he said "to try to give you wisdom where you broke down before. to try to give you knowledge before you go through the door. to try to make you stronger, if you should do it again. and to always let you know that i am your constant friend. i am with you in your solitude i am with you while you sit surrounded by friends. i scream my name LONLINESS! in your ears very loud. never forget my power or giving me my hours." and with that he sat his fat ass down

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Date: 11/23/2009 3:26:00 PM
angry for being lonely,lonely cos of a flirt..whom her face you must put in dirt,,,Loniliness can knock on our door and it can be very powerful,even when we are in crowds..heartache makes our loniliness worst,and anger,frustates us,,we all pass from these moments,this are bad moments,eventually they pass and Sunshine comes full of smiling rays..one of your best poems John,, going to my favs--Charma
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Date: 11/22/2009 8:49:00 PM
"Slap her face and rub her name in the dirt". Lines like that ring a lot of bells in my head, like someone's unconscious desires seem to scream in unison with mine. I can't shake that line. Normally I'd think you're attacking one of your characters, anger or loneliness, but then I see it's a woman and I automatically think of the woman who's name rhymes with 'bliss'.
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Date: 11/21/2009 11:58:00 AM
i enjoyed reading this lovly write! :) and thank you very much for taking the time to read my poem. i appreciate it very much and i am glad you liked it. i wish you a happy thanksgiving! god bless, megan
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Date: 11/21/2009 11:07:00 AM
Wow, John, this is surely one of your best poems! You had my attention from the start as you tried to keep loneliness at bay by locking the door and turning up the music. But anger had a key! Sometimes we do feel lonely even when we are among friends, John. And I love the way you ended the poem! Straight to my favorites, John. Love you, Carolyn
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