The Vigil

The Vigil (Octodil) Late through the night A flame burns oil. He sits with weary eyes In vigil by the bed. She lies supine; soft is her breath, Peaceful, serene her pallid face. He sleeps; she breathes no more. Oil-starved the flame goes out.

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Julia Ward

Date: 2/16/2015 2:42:00 AM

"Oil-starved" is a particularly beautiful phrase. Alicia, xxx

Paul Callus
Date: 2/16/2015 3:46:00 PM

This is your third most lovely visit today, Alicia....I like and appreciate! hugs // paul

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 2/12/2015 7:00:00 PM

Hard to stop thinking of the end- as we age it gets closer & closer, too bad I couldn't come see Malta! Light & Love

Paul Callus
Date: 2/13/2015 8:52:00 AM

...Malta still awaits you:)

Paul Callus
Date: 2/13/2015 8:50:00 AM

You are right, Debbie; I know the feeling!! Keeping myself always on the go helps to distract the mind from such mental creepy crawlies:) All the best. // paul

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 2/7/2015 2:48:00 PM

How mind-setted this is Paul. I've enjoyed reading this. Verlena

Paul Callus
Date: 2/7/2015 3:59:00 PM

Thank you Verlena; I always give weight to your comments! All the best. // paul

M. L. Kiser

Date: 2/5/2015 2:38:00 PM

How true...beautifully worded.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2015 3:00:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed, ML. Thank you! All the best. // paul

Vandana Sharma

Date: 2/4/2015 10:52:00 PM

The loss of a loved one is so painful..............

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2015 1:57:00 AM

Hi Vandana! Thank you for stopping by. All the best. // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 2/3/2015 3:21:00 PM

sad but very beautiful, my friend. Had a little snow here - although, it melted as soon as it hit the ground.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/3/2015 3:33:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed it Jack. I hear you're getting it cold over there! Take care my friend. // paul

Monterey Sirak

Date: 2/3/2015 7:30:00 AM

Stunning! So beautiful that the light in his life goes out when she leaves, almost as if she blew the candle out with her last breath.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/3/2015 9:08:00 AM

I love your comments, Monterey! You read and understand my poem well. Thank you! All the best. // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/2/2015 12:33:00 PM

I like the emotive feel to this one.. I feel several sets of emotions from this one..I can feel the love of this care giver and the pain..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 2/2/2015 5:47:00 PM

Thank you for the insightful comments, Sara. Stopping by your posts is always a pleasure:) Take care. // paul

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 2/1/2015 4:50:00 PM

A part of the found joy of writing in forms is finding just the right vehicle for your message and you have found it ;) Light & Love

Paul Callus
Date: 2/2/2015 4:56:00 PM

You are right, Debbie. Some forms have the power to inspire; not all can do that; this Octodil suits my muse perfectly. All the best and God bless. // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/1/2015 12:28:00 PM

- A beautiful end of life - Excellent imaging in your words, Paul - hug // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 2/1/2015 3:59:00 PM

Hi Anne Lise! Writing about death is not something I usually tackle, but this form allowed me to treat the subject with dignity. Thank you for stopping by with lovely comments. /x/ paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 2/1/2015 12:19:00 PM

my goodness... this is way out of the ball park, paul...you are giving me a run for the money, lol.. this is languid, impressionistic in style... wow!.. and congrats on your wins; I'm having tech problems on soup and can't stay long.. till soon!..huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 2/1/2015 3:55:00 PM

I'm so very impressed and encouraged by your comments, Nette! So pleased with your reaction to this write. I found this form to be a great tool to work with; entered a write for your contest and wrote this extra one as well. All the best...hugs // paul

Poesy Relish

Date: 2/1/2015 11:16:00 AM

awesome pen Paul... loved the last line... speaks a lot.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/1/2015 12:02:00 PM

Hi Nadiya! Your complimentary remarks are most welcome; that last line ties everything up. All the best. // paul

Gary Bateman

Date: 2/1/2015 8:58:00 AM

A Great Verse write Paul. Quite compelling and most descriptive. And a "7" and FAV from me!! Best Always, Gary

Paul Callus
Date: 2/1/2015 12:00:00 PM

Many thanks to you Gary!! I am pleased that you enjoyed, and I very much appreciate the high rating and the fav!! All the best. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 2/1/2015 8:03:00 AM

:( i like how you present it light that goes out with the lamp and the death... and so with the husband probable decreasing energy.......... how can I say it... mmmmn 3 different angles but it does presents one specific subject.. :) i like it!!!! :)! --olive eloisa stay Blesed.. :)! hugs and hugs.. :D@

Paul Callus
Date: 2/1/2015 11:58:00 AM

Once again your sharp mind sees all three contrasting points Olive_eloi! Well done and thank you. Hope you had a lovely Sunday! hugs + :):):) paul