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The View As I Wait

There are two types of wire fence here Squares and diamonds It's not interesting Apart from the fact the competing patterns look like those in an iris I can look through them There's an abandoned building Sturdy yet decaying Once occupied Now just residual energy that carries weight, felt from two fences away Between me, them and the building is a path I'd have to walk quite far to get onto it Then I'd walk the space between squares and diamonds Between the pattern of the iris See things differently Maybe see myself gazing at an empty building deep in thought

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Date: 7/21/2023 9:03:00 PM
Quite an absorbing and interesting journey into thoughts triggered by a simple observation....enjoyed this playful meander...good one DD. Paul
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Date: 7/21/2023 10:58:00 PM
Thank you Paul, always a joy to receive a comment from yourself. It's fun to stare and see what associations present from an image. I should have taken a photo actually - it was perhaps the least inspiring of views though :)
Date: 7/21/2023 12:33:00 PM
You have an abstract eye for the tiniest of details Dilly, strange how fences appear both square and diamond shaped depending on our line of sight, but you take us further here into the iris of a subconscious like state, brilliantly penned, cheers David
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 7/21/2023 10:55:00 PM
Haha good to hear it :)
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David Kavanagh
Date: 7/21/2023 12:58:00 PM
Leave it be Dilly, AI still works by binary subroutines at the moment, I think I’m still autonomous, and definitely wouldn’t be capable of dissing this one!
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 7/21/2023 12:35:00 PM
Thanks David - for a laugh I just asked Chatgpt for a scathing review and a rave review - glad you stepped in with a human comment or I might have deleted it :D
Date: 7/21/2023 12:27:00 PM
A creative write. Enjoyed it. Have a blessed weekend.....................
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 7/21/2023 12:32:00 PM
Thank you Paula, hope you have a lovely weekend x

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