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The Very Last Second

clouds shifting-- the moon dancing on puddles in syncopation the whiz and ping of bullets that he can no longer hear © nov cgh war tanka

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 12/10/2011 10:28:00 PM
Good tanka, Charles. Just correct the misspelling in your third line. The word is correctly spelled "syncopation".
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Date: 11/25/2011 11:36:00 PM
This one is my favorite of the three I just saw. It's awesome!
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