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The Vanity of Pleasure

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Date: Dec 03, 2023

Contest Name: Pick a Title Volume 40

Contest Sponser: Edward Ibeh

The Vanity of Pleasure Temptation tingles I was confused by my desire I believed the sensual was transcendent Rising as I did on the waves of want Seduced by skin a wanton whisper A Goddess wrapped in cellophane Eyes that made me weak in my knees Feather soft fingertips Sweet supple lips Screams of delight Slipping into tunnels tight A train on a fast track Her beneath me on her back She fed my erupting ego Made me feel like a man I was less somehow but more than my awkward self First time fast Captivated by her cyclone power An attraction distraction One that could never fulfil Like trying to extract happy from a pill My vanity insanity exercising of my free will Her name not known Me just a bit part in her play The 17 year old kid That pleasure whisked away.

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Silent One

Date: 12/17/2023 3:25:00 AM

Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/17/2023 5:48:00 AM

Thanks.

Christuraj Alex

Date: 12/16/2023 7:21:00 PM

"waves of want", "A Goddess wrapped in cellophane", "Like trying to extract happy from a pill" - Powerful expressions. Congratulations!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/17/2023 5:48:00 AM

Much appreciated.

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/16/2023 6:01:00 AM

This exemplary probe fully explores the intricacies of the lifestyle, shedding light on our inherent trend to yield to enticement and the results that grow clear during our formative years. Hearty congratulations on your well-deserved win

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/16/2023 6:07:00 AM

Thanks my friend.

Edward Ibeh

Date: 12/16/2023 4:56:00 AM

What a masterfully crafted piece, Richard:-) It's a pleasant surprise to see you here! Congratulations on your win in my contest!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/16/2023 6:08:00 AM

Thanks for selecting my poem. I am enjoying the entries to your contest. Blessings Richard.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 12/4/2023 11:40:00 AM

Another poem that delves into learning experiences from your masterful pen, Richard, playing with the concepts of pleasure and regret so skillfully written with dynamic images and phrasing. I am so glad I found your poem. It is sensual and emotive. Thank you! Blessings!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/5/2023 12:51:00 PM

I’m pleased you enjoyed it. Thanks for the visit.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/3/2023 4:44:00 PM

ah, the raging teenage hormones! Hard to overcome those and act rationally...most don't. I love the word play in your poem, especially the happy pill line. Engaging poem, Richard. Have a great evening, Sara

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/3/2023 8:06:00 PM

Ha haha, I know people in their 40s 50s and 60s who still haven’t got them under control.

Tom Woody

Date: 12/3/2023 10:06:00 AM

Vaseline lips? Why not. Teen sex is indeed vanity. Should be outlawed lol. Still, those primal instincts can be hard to keep under control

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/3/2023 11:47:00 AM

True, lives can change in a moment. For some the consequences of youthful encounters lasts a lifetime. Thanks for reading and commenting.

Ink Empress

Date: 12/3/2023 9:39:00 AM

Very creative rhymes and rhythm to your brilliant write: i love the flow of your storytelling and how subtly and poetically you’ve also played with words espoused the happy pill line was clever. Temptations can be distractions and you’ve written so well on this theme. Pleasure reading. BOL for the contest

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/3/2023 11:49:00 AM

I’m pleased you enjoyed this poem. Thanks for taking time to read and comment.

Silent One

Date: 12/3/2023 7:26:00 AM

An excellent take on this theme.. we have a lot of things from the age of 17 that are a result of temptation..

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/16/2023 7:39:00 PM

I was 17 w/my 1st son, he's 47 now, mom just left her hospital rm when I did mom's routine of counting, toes, eyes, etc., and I didn't know she was up, she said, "OMG you are so 17--he's yours give it a rest!" (she's 21), "Babe, I was just doin'...oh forget it," That my friends became the normal length of future gabbage written in stoned.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/3/2023 8:07:00 PM

You were smarter than I was. Fortunately she didn’t become pregnant.

Silent One
Date: 12/3/2023 12:42:00 PM

when i was 17 I dated a 28 year old briefly, but I did not let her sleep with me.. was difficult, but i was too afraid she would get pregnant!

Tom Woody
Date: 12/3/2023 10:07:00 AM

Not quite The Graduate but close

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/3/2023 7:28:00 AM

Indeed. My temptation was a 23 year old hairdresser.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/3/2023 7:24:00 AM

I enjoyed your write/story. Good Luck... Have a wonderful day..................

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/3/2023 7:29:00 AM

Thanks for reading and commenting.