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'the Unreal of Real Life'

Her instinct was to run as fast as she could... Her feet started to move, Slowly at first, gradually faster, But then she bumped into something A wall, layered with promises, unfulfilled ones one by one she delved into them… NUMBER ONE said, “I will always love you”, In little pieces it crumbled to the floor NUMBER TWO had the words, “Our love will last forever “, Now scattered NUMBER THREE echoed the words, I would never hurt you, a promise so fragile NUMBER FOUR “We’re in this together”, totally distorted... When she got to layer NUMBER FIVE a single tear slipped from her eye because there she saw an image of who she was Before his empty promises And all she hoped for was One last chance to be “That woman again!!... One last try To fix the broken pieces Before his footprints Demolished everything she was before him.. 090620111350 Contest: Latest Poem On The Soup 4th Place

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Scarlett Crittenden

Date: 6/13/2011 6:35:00 AM

empowering..i like your free verse style. congratulations. Scarlett

Kash Poet

Date: 6/12/2011 6:27:00 PM

Congrats Wilma on your win ...Liked it 1st time around.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/12/2011 11:31:00 AM

thank you WILMA, and Congratulations 4 this wonderful entry!!!! Thank you once again, I'm also honored to have you support any of my contest. Don't miss out on my next one.. Take care,..p.d

Joseph Osita

Date: 6/12/2011 10:56:00 AM

Many Congrats on your big win in PD'S contest

Jack Horne

Date: 6/12/2011 10:16:00 AM

Many congrats on your win, Wilma : ) Thanks for your sweet words on my blog

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 6/12/2011 9:56:00 AM

Loved this poem first time I read it, so I am happy you entered this one, missy ;) Congrats on your win :D and ooh wee, hmmmm.....Something seems to be a-brewing -- I smell coffee ;) mwahugs :D

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 6/12/2011 9:15:00 AM

My congratulations on the win in the contest of p.d., Wilma

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 6/12/2011 8:07:00 AM

Congrats Wilma on your excellent win in PD's contest with your last post which is as fabulous as all your posts my friend.. enjoy another success for excellence in poetry my friend..luv..

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/12/2011 2:45:00 AM

a racy piece that shout out loud the sense of inner power, wilms.. perky cheers for the amazing award!! :) huggs

Kash Poet

Date: 6/10/2011 7:20:00 PM

A wonderful poem here Wilma..I hate those men.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 6/10/2011 11:19:00 AM

Awesome, Wilma. It's so hard to get back to the person you were before someone has trampled on your heart. Incredible poem for my faves. I can certainly relate to this woman. Perhaps it was based on someone you know? Love and blessings, Carolyn

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 6/10/2011 10:13:00 AM

Well you know by my writes either from now or past I get you like no other..... Beautiful words you have shared from your soul and heart.... love Michael

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/9/2011 1:00:00 PM

Relationships can hurt and leave us broken but there is a friend that stickest closer than a brother..Enjoyed reading your metaphorical work..Very creative I must say..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work...Sara

James Foulk

Date: 6/9/2011 11:07:00 AM

such a very wonderful, well written, creative piece of poetry, enjoyed it. thank you for commenting on Little Blue Eyes.

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 6/9/2011 10:24:00 AM

You know already what I think about this stunner of a thought-provoking piece -- really happy to see it here, Missy :) hmm is there a door number 6?? mwahugs to you :) btw love your title of this ;)

Felix Abbey-Mensah

Date: 6/9/2011 5:35:00 AM

Wonderful piece my dear friend... I enjoyed this poem right from the star to the end... This is pure creativity... Excellent by all standards... Let me hear more from you..