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The Traveller

The midnight pokes out from under the dirt, navy, with chrome trim, catching the moon’s eye, that Ally Sheedy fringe can’t help but flirt, as her 1970’s Audi stands by… idle, cobwebs spinning on in the while, the girl cannot see out, for winter’s fate, has become a little bit more hostile, she stares down at her steering wheel in wait. Her backseat is leathered in memories, I imagine as trinkets from her past, adventures, she seems way too young, to me, to be out alone in the world, so fast, unaware, that I have been watching her, devising a tale under night’s voyeur.

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Date: 2/16/2024 9:18:00 AM
Dear Kate, This grabbed me from the very first line. The image of the "midnight navy" Audi with its "Ally Sheedy fringe" winking at the moon is captivating, and it instantly sets the scene for a mysterious and intriguing story. But what truly intrigued me is the observer, the "I" watching from the shadows. Who are they? Are they merely a concerned onlooker, or do they harbor darker intentions? This ambiguity adds a layer of suspense, leaving the reader wanting more. Beautifully crafted poem.- Blessings, Daniel
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Kate Davies
Date: 2/16/2024 9:23:00 AM
Hi Daniel, thank you for the lovely words, it is truly appreciated. The observer is me, I saw this girl from across the road and she intrigued me. I left it purposefully open as it can take on different meanings

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