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The Town of the Past

Darkness seeps down the rooftops Into the old, dark town—I stop And listen to the calming rain For a moment forgetting about the pain I vaguely remember who died here As the darkness releases a bitter tear I pause and watch the hefty rain For once forgetting that I am insane She is beautiful—I can feel her As my hands reach out into the blur Her long white gown seeps in the rain The gown she would wear…never again The place is named The Town of the Past And here I know my soul will last Though not dead I can smell the rain Of lost ones and live ones that still remain She reaches out to me—how strange! And in her eyes I see a change Her heartbeat dances with the rain STOP! —I close it in a box and pray: Please Rest in peace all of you dead And may the rain cease On the ground you once tread I promise you all—you will tread on it again

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 1/29/2012 9:50:00 PM
Dear Laura, Intriguing I Like the last Line Great Writing LOVE ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Liege...Harry
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Date: 11/4/2011 8:49:00 AM
BEAUTIFUL! At the beginning, it felt as if you were talking about the fictitious town "Silent Hill" from that survival horror game. You've ended it really well
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 11/4/2011 8:18:00 PM
You know, that movie was crossing my mind as I was writing believe it or not! Thanks for the kind comments! :)
Date: 11/3/2011 7:19:00 AM
Really like the last line and ending in such a very positive note...Enjoyed reading this morn..Thanks for stopping by, reading, and commenting on my work..Sara
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Date: 11/3/2011 6:46:00 AM
This is lovely - in a dark sort of a way, you've built a great atmosphere, and the story hints throughout build the start of a great story, the imagination could go along way with this one. Enjoyed.
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Date: 11/3/2011 6:39:00 AM
I think this is just a wonderful tribute, so richly heartfelt and passionate.. I enjoy reading and considering it
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