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The Temptation of Eve and Adam

The Temptation of Eve and Adam
I never meant to give up Paradise. I should have been content with each golden sunrise, But that abominable serpent had me completely mesmerized, Whispering strange suggestions in my ears, it took me quite by surprise. Too late I realized That my mind had been paralyzed, Tricked by this evil personified, And somehow I couldn’t resist gazing into its malevolent, cold, reptilian eyes.
Surrendering to its hypnotic spell, Blood-red apple enchanting me, enticing me, it was an easy sell. Convincing Adam to do the same was simple and he took a bite as well. Alas, disobedience has its consequences, and in a nutshell, From the Garden of Eden we were expelled, Banished to the realms of eternal hell. Like common criminals who get caught and thrown into a jail cell, We are considered to be utter dumbbells. And our names are now listed in the Hall of Infamy where they will always dwell.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 8/29/2014 8:26:00 PM
I enjoyed your creative take on the old story - Bravo! Kika
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 8/29/2014 10:09:00 PM
Thank you Kika. I appreciate your praise! Pandita
Date: 7/3/2014 3:58:00 PM
I LOVED IT ...
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 7/4/2014 12:31:00 PM
Hina, my friend, thank you for your sweet compliments!
Date: 6/21/2014 6:46:00 PM
they are not infamous, they are revered, Pandita. If not for their original sin, none of us would be here today. They would still be in the garden not even aware of what to do with themselves!! I enjoyed reading this one.
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 6/22/2014 5:23:00 AM
Hi Andrea, thank you for your kind feedback. And you are absolutely right that we have to give them full credit for original sin and the rest is his/herstory! Warmest regards.
Date: 6/15/2014 7:29:00 PM
I like Peter's take too. God knew he would forgive us from the start. Amen.
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 6/15/2014 7:51:00 PM
Hi Robert, thank you so much for visiting and I do appreciate your comments! Amen!
Date: 6/10/2014 10:12:00 AM
Wow outstanding poetic review n recap of that true story i believe in too and how d devil serpent stil tempts us to harmful sin. Yor rhymin skills are impresive as well. R u a christian poetess? Warmest wishes
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 6/10/2014 1:13:00 PM
Hi my friend, so happy to hear from you. Thank you for the great compliments. I am Christian. Please visit again. Kindest regards.
Date: 6/4/2014 1:49:00 PM
This delightful couple are still with us!--nothing but smiles here--from a happy sinner Pandita, thank you for visiting my site this morning...and thus for leading me to yours!
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 6/4/2014 1:59:00 PM
Robert, thank you so much for visiting and for your wonderful comments! I enjoy your work very much!
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Robert Ludden
Date: 6/4/2014 1:53:00 PM
OOPS! Should have been a period after sinner. I'm the guy
Date: 6/1/2014 11:12:00 PM
I see temptation in this write my friend. Cast away that darn apple and save yourself for your future man! lol Seriously,, a truly great write my friend!!! BBBRAVOO!!
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Robert Lindley
Date: 6/5/2014 9:21:00 AM
Thank you my friend. My wife in it makes it so!!!!!
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 6/2/2014 7:12:00 AM
Thank you so much Robert! And your avatar is just beautiful!
Date: 6/1/2014 3:06:00 PM
Hi Pandita, We all fall prey to temptation sometime. This wonderful poem has a universal message to which many will relate. And remember, we must forgive ourselves if we are to move forward after making mistakes. Best wishes, Carolyn
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 6/2/2014 7:14:00 AM
Thank you so much, Carolyn for your comments. And you are so right - we do have to forgive ourselves after making mistakes!
Date: 6/1/2014 9:53:00 AM
Still . . . If you and Adam hadn't bitten that darn apple you wouldn't have realized you were nekkid, and knowing you were nekkid, things started growing and soon you were dancing the lustful game of skin against skin. Was it worth it? Ehh . . . I suppose it is according to whom you talk to about it. As for me? Yup.
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 6/1/2014 11:17:00 AM
Hey Jerry, thanks for your insightful response:) Warm regards!

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