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The Subtle Knife

Beg for sadness, end Fighting, a castrated peace Open cuts, betray ©Drake J. Eszes "Fighting for peace is like screwing for virginity." -Carlin

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Sandy Ivy D

Date: 3/22/2014 9:42:00 PM

Powerful senryu. SandyIvy

Poet Tacito
Date: 3/24/2014 11:34:00 PM

I appreciate that. Thanks!

Michael Dom

Date: 12/27/2013 8:30:00 PM

Reads like salt on paper cuts.

Betty Bateson

Date: 12/25/2013 9:32:00 AM

Yours are sharp words and so very true.

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/27/2013 8:41:00 AM

Many thanks, Betty. I do appreciate it.

Donna Jones

Date: 12/22/2013 6:03:00 PM

H yes

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/22/2013 8:43:00 PM

LOL! Awesome. :)

Kelly Deschler

Date: 12/18/2013 8:16:00 PM

When we have to fight for peace, no one wins. Peace should be free for everyone to enjoy, like fresh air and sunshine. What's the point of fighting over something that we already have access to in our own hearts? A very powerful message in this poem! Amazing work, Drake!

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/19/2013 7:17:00 AM

Hell yeah, Kelly! Definitely! I absolutely couldn't agree more. When an entity or group has to tell adults that treating others poorly is wrong, that is the equivalent to McDonalds' warning labels on cups that coffee is hot.

James Kelley

Date: 12/16/2013 8:31:00 AM

shiiiiitttt-ake mushrooms...

James Kelley
Date: 12/16/2013 11:04:00 AM

LOL

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/16/2013 8:45:00 AM

HAHAHAHAH! YES! Agreed.

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 12/13/2013 8:43:00 PM

A very thoughtful verse here. Rewarding to read- thanks for sharing. : ) Always, Laura

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/16/2013 8:45:00 AM

And thank you for stopping by, Laura! =)

Chuck Melugin

Date: 12/13/2013 4:56:00 PM

Drake Well said and true! Truth has an unwelcome ring! My Best, chuck

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/16/2013 8:45:00 AM

Thank you very much, Chuck! Yes, quite right!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/13/2013 8:53:00 AM

Good morning Drake.

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/13/2013 12:28:00 PM

Hola sir!

Eileen Manassian

Date: 12/11/2013 3:15:00 PM

Hey! Just passing by...Miss ya! Hugs

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/12/2013 10:02:00 AM

And hi to you too. =) Hugs!

Monterey Sirak

Date: 12/11/2013 7:51:00 AM

Yes, sometimes peace seems to be the most fought over concept. Your talent for exposing the bare belly of truth amazes me.

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/11/2013 8:51:00 AM

It's one of the saddest ironies of our time. Yet, the sheep continue to walk that path in cotton bunches of immaturity. Thank you so much, Monterey!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/11/2013 7:47:00 AM

Good morning Drake.

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/11/2013 8:50:00 AM

Hola!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 12/11/2013 4:20:00 AM

piercing way to clamor for peace, drake... i am blown by the magnitude of your message in just a few words.. some kind of awesome!.. huggs

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/11/2013 6:09:00 AM

Then you see/understand the bigger goal here. I'm so grateful for you, Nette. We're long overdue on a Skype chat. Hug!

James Marshall Goff

Date: 12/10/2013 7:08:00 PM

True that...Thanks for stopping by, I was channeling Bly's "Men's Retreat!"

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/11/2013 6:08:00 AM

HA! Awesome! =D Makes total sense. Thanks so much, Jimbo!

Sarai Virden

Date: 12/10/2013 11:31:00 AM

You never cease to amaze with your talent. Always so thoughtfully deep. Hugs

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/11/2013 5:58:00 AM

Awesome. I'm very glad to hear that, Sarai. Thank you!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/10/2013 9:27:00 AM

a powerful one, Drake!! what a quote you put with it!!!

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/10/2013 9:32:00 AM

I absolutely appreciate that, Andrea. Truly. :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/10/2013 8:58:00 AM

I do love that quote from Carlin. Thanks for making me smile. "castrated peace" what a great coupling of words!

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/10/2013 9:01:00 AM

Yes, that quote resounds strongly with me. You're very welcome, Richard! =D

Russell Sivey

Date: 12/10/2013 4:56:00 AM

Wow, the power behind your words is extremely exceptional my friend! You have impressed me wit this Senryu, a form I haven't seen you try yet, but it suits you well, you did very awesome with it! "...screwing for virginity" Ha ha now that is funny, but also a very serious ring to it! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this illustrious piece Drake, What a fabulous poem, Great Work!!

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/10/2013 8:59:00 AM

I've dabbled in a few Senryus in my time. ;-) But, I do WHOLLY appreciate it. =D You rock, Russell. Thank you!

Eileen Manassian

Date: 12/9/2013 1:01:00 PM

Drake, my dear........you tell 'em! Lovely write full of desire and longing for a better more peaceful existence. Great job! Hugs

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/9/2013 1:03:00 PM

I shall. Promise. ;-) Thank you, darling Eileen!