The Student Bar

The student bar I went there just to see All the decency lost Nudity everywhere Parents don't have a clue The Noise , the drunkness ,the drama Pretense celebrities I went there just to see Embarrassed to say, words fail me A mere look tells you all This place, a reflections of the horrors of our society A little hell When do they grow up I just went there to see All the chaos , flying bottles Church people, oh i am embrassed to say Those smiles and that socialising unity Beauty distorted, love measured The height of the voices I just went there to see but what i saw i am embarrassed to say. Written by Tawona Ranganawa

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/18/2013 6:17:00 PM

Hi Tawona, . ;) Congratulation, on your winning fantasy poem... Sending Smiles. *LINDA*

Tawona Mzila Ranganawa
Date: 11/18/2013 6:54:00 PM

Thank you very much

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 11/18/2013 12:33:00 AM

Congratulations on the fine win, Tawona

Tawona Mzila Ranganawa
Date: 11/18/2013 3:19:00 AM

Thank you very much

Monterey Sirak

Date: 11/14/2013 6:53:00 AM

Wonderful descriptions. I can tell by the images in the poem that you immersed yourself in the scene, not just imagined it. Well done. And welcome to the soup.

Tawona Mzila Ranganawa
Date: 11/14/2013 7:33:00 AM

Thank you

David Fisher

Date: 11/13/2013 8:50:00 PM

Enjoyed your poem and how you narrated it as if the bar was to be studied. I liked the contrast.

Tawona Mzila Ranganawa
Date: 11/14/2013 12:54:00 AM

I went to the bar to actual write the poem. I am glad you can tell because I wanted people to feel that i was actually there.