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A program is pending. Kids are milling around, ending the day on the fall afternoon. A pamphlet about war is displayed on each desk, ignored by the class, who are restless, at best. Just a few books are opened, at the teacher's request There's a strange mix of whispering, laughter, and squirming. Chairs have been scooted to make extra room No one much caring that a speaker is due. They are just in a hurry to finish the day. To leave with their friends, get on with their lives….. The noise in the room hums like bees in hive A guest soon appears, without much fanfare Slow is his gait, from a limp. And they stare how it takes him a moment to gather his words. His gaze drifts away, to something reserved His face marked of age, furrows deeply endowed But, as his story unfolds, ...and the quiet takes hold, all the air in the classroom is breathless and cold. And so,.. left behind are scars of the truth that will mark them forever, give them a cruel lesson of life, lesson of death, lesson of courage, and much more respect This was not just a movie, a book or a tale But truth beyond fiction, a story of hell The remains of his youth, are now left in their hands to change what could happen, and never forget With far-away eyes, and with sage not denied The frail little man has made the room cry Their tears brim with outrage, compassion and vows The room has gone silent, but his light will shine on The dust motes have settled, sun silvers his hair Enlightenment enters where dark once appeared The world at the window is now theirs to own Somehow grown older……..they watch the man go with the tears of their sorrow, on a fall afternoon

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 10/24/2016 6:10:00 PM
Oh my, you are so good at your story telling, CArrie. This is a very well deserved win. A SEVEN
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Date: 10/18/2016 1:25:00 AM
Carrie beautifully written by you a gifted storyteller too...congratulations on your win
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Date: 10/17/2016 8:09:00 PM
The "scars of the truth" sear the mind with the horror that occurred...Congrats on your win
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Date: 10/17/2016 5:54:00 PM
I love the description of the room you painted and the scooting of the chairs..."The noise in the room hums like bees in a hive" , "But truth beyond fiction, a story of hell" children are so impressionable. :'( congratulations on your win .. Hugs Eve
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Date: 10/17/2016 2:03:00 PM
Great storytelling in verse Carrie, you roll this out and let the reader be that child, no details required just the terrible blank spaces that history has taught us....eerily beautiful write, ...I seriously envy your style ...Ian x
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Date: 10/17/2016 12:25:00 PM
Interesting write. Very moving and sorrowful. Congratulations on your placement.
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Date: 10/17/2016 12:16:00 PM
Great is the story, the story of survival, the cruelty of life. Great!
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Date: 10/17/2016 7:09:00 AM
Beautifully written, a great interpretation on a tricky theme, Carrie. I'm sure you'll do well. Viv x
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Date: 10/13/2016 9:05:00 PM
Very nice Carrie, can just imagine the students listening awe-struck by what the man tells them about how he survived the Holocaust! G/L in the contest!:)
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Date: 10/13/2016 6:39:00 PM
Love the story, ..it would take a man such as this to reach young students... you're from a family of teachers ..both my sons are teachers..
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Carrie Richards
Date: 10/13/2016 8:23:00 PM
Thank you for stopping by Frederic, and the compliment . As coincidence...both of my sons are also teachers (High School...one teaches the Sciences... the other son teaches both English and Math. My brother is also a retired teacher. It runs in our family !! :) Good for your sons...we need good teachers !!!
Date: 10/13/2016 4:46:00 PM
this is wonderful, carrie! i didn't realize it was for a contest (until the end) but i was thinking all through the poem that this was about a holocaust survivor. i volunteer at a holocaust museum in manhattan and the most powerful experiences people have involve meeting survivors. seeing those numbers on someone's arm always has a profound effect on me. you've captured that so well in your poem...
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Carrie Richards
Date: 10/13/2016 8:09:00 PM
I can't imagine the emotions or how touched you must be to work and meet these amazing survivors, Ilene. I think my heart would burst with such an honor. Thank you for sharing :)
Date: 10/13/2016 4:16:00 PM
Made my heart cry, well written. Last verse is my favorite. Are you a teacher perchance?
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Paloma P
Date: 10/13/2016 4:52:00 PM
I knew it! :)
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Carrie Richards
Date: 10/13/2016 4:39:00 PM
Thank you, Paloma for the compliment :) I am from a family of teachers..... you are perceptive !!

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