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The Sting of Nettled Showers

To the sound of pelting rain, she woke in early morning Upon the tattered tin roof, it rhythmically pitter pattered No sunlight peeked through clouds on daylight's dawning She thought of him and of the dreams that were shattered, of the nights she'd spend without end, remorse spawning Windblown rain pummeled windows, on sills it splashed Obscured was her view, vision blurred behind each pane Howled as does a wolf, thunder growled, lightning flashed In rivulets like rain, was weeping she struggled to restrain Like drops of blood from a wound, her teardrops splashed That night, in shadowed lamplight she espied on the corner, a familiar silhouette of one whose countenance was a given Dark eyes of a raven who had waived his right to scorn her No vocal cawing was riven as torrents of rain were driven He was beyond the reach of this sad beseeching mourner Outside she ventured, into the sting of nettled showers for just one glimpse of him, she would offer as her reason On the street, scattered at her feet, her espousal flowers Fallacy, was an act Charlotte Bronte' would label 'treason' Uncloaked, soaked, she stood with her memories for hours From grief she could not hide nor abide her mirrored face His eyes, for once unveiled, yet not one word did he speak A webbing of fine silk threads spun, woven in warm embrace He had raised no hand in farewell. A tear grazed her cheek Without solace she would linger in portals of empty space She trembled, shivering, eyes teary, there was no mistaking her sips from tainted cup had the caustic taste of bitter gall The impeccant knight chose the right to claim his forsaking Nimbus skies lay overcast without surcease of a graying pall Fraught with aching, she sighed one word, "heartbreaking."

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Date: 5/31/2023 8:57:00 AM
" The impeccant knight chose the right to claim his forsaking" A great poem my friend this verse struck me as specially significant. A gem and a fav too.
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Lin Lane
Date: 5/31/2023 10:32:00 AM
I am always grateful to know what lines readers find intriguing. Thanks so much for your supporting comments, Robert.
Date: 5/30/2023 5:42:00 AM
I love the "sting of nettled showers" you weave this tale so well and take the reader there with such amazing detail. Enjoyed this sad narrative.
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Lin Lane
Date: 5/30/2023 5:49:00 AM
I’m so pleased with your comments, Nancy. Thank you for reading me.
Date: 5/27/2023 5:07:00 AM
Lin, your ability to craft this dark and shadowy mood is really quite amazing! I surely wish I could! The last line, the last word, perfectly encapsulates that entire write! Excellent!!! Happy Saturday xxoo
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Lin Lane
Date: 5/27/2023 12:19:00 PM
To read such accolades from you, Mike, is akin to opening a treasure chest of gold. Thank you ever so sincerely.
Date: 5/26/2023 3:10:00 PM
This is so eloquent of the pain of heartbreak, I especially like 'she stood with her memories for hours' and 'nimbus skies lay overcast without surcease of a graying pall' - that has the feel of Edgar Allen Poe to me~
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Lin Lane
Date: 5/26/2023 3:57:00 PM
Michelle, I am grateful to you for reading the pangs of heartbreak in my verses, and always glad when told which lines a reader likes most. To compare my poetry with Poe in even the slightest way is encouraging. Thank you for your compliments.;-). As for you, Jan. I know you are talented enough to write much more than poop, and you have. Love ya!
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Jan Allison
Date: 5/26/2023 3:41:00 PM
ah yes the raven I agree Michelle:-) I write poop - Lin write proper poetry!
Date: 5/26/2023 1:09:00 PM
from shattered dreams and the beseeching mourner, a picture you have painted of utter sadness that was lived and felt in your poem is also felt by the reader...dear poet
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Lin Lane
Date: 5/26/2023 1:24:00 PM
Frederic, your insightful review captures the depth of angst this poem intended to portray. A heart broken as badly as were the shattered dreams. Thank you.
Date: 5/26/2023 9:11:00 AM
wow Lin this one sure packs a punch, what a sorrowful story indeed. your deep dark imagery is amazing and I love the liberal use of alliteration. a poetic masterpiece my dear, into my faves
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Lin Lane
Date: 5/26/2023 10:56:00 AM
Hi Jan. You're comments and the fave are very generous gifts you offer my lines. Thank you for your unfailing support.
Date: 5/26/2023 7:05:00 AM
Pretty sad, Lin. "The impeccant knight chose the right to claim his forsaking" You win some, you lose some.
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Lin Lane
Date: 5/26/2023 7:53:00 AM
His armor was shining. His cause was just.
Date: 5/26/2023 5:18:00 AM
WOW Lin thats a real beauty! I was gripped to the end! Debx
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Lin Lane
Date: 5/26/2023 5:29:00 AM
I know it's rather long, so I'm glad it held your attention, and thank you for reading it to the end, Deb.

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