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The Shell of Your Frame

Should you carry me, sweet fancy, Only to descend flat into the ground? Ashamed, I bear you now Upon my weary shoulder - the shell of your frame Ashamed of my name Ashamed to the grave March 21, 2015

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Maurice Yvonne

Date: 4/9/2015 9:37:00 AM

Oh sorry, one more thing, I love the title!

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 4/9/2015 9:35:00 AM

I agree with John one has to wrestle with meaning with this write. However that too is vital in poetry. Within the context of your other poems. There is a message I read here. I enjoyed this read.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 4/9/2015 3:32:00 PM

Maurice, your comments are always very thoughtful...I am touched by your visits..it means so much to me. ~Laura

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 3/30/2015 6:47:00 AM

:) I was caught by the title but the more I am awed that in few words you deliver a solid message.. :)!//olive eloisa

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 4/9/2015 3:28:00 PM

Thanks dear...it's a rather dark one - thaank you for stopping by ~Laura

Justin Bordner

Date: 3/26/2015 8:28:00 PM

Be not ashamed of love's s audacity, it is your great fancy and fight Laura...the ferling of fatigue and death is btilliantly conveyed with simplicity and concision, "Only to descend flat into the ground..." xool! J.A.B.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/27/2015 5:09:00 AM

Thanks Justin! The idea of having one's burdens be lifted by another, only to break them, and the reciprocal relationship of hurting and interacting... I tried to be clearer with my thoughts. I'm a little bit of a mess lately.It means a lot that you come around to read and give your sweet words of encouragement. I'm looking at your new contest. hm.... you've got my wheels turning.. <3~Laura

John Fleming

Date: 3/26/2015 1:11:00 PM

Intriguing, Laura! Still trying to figure this one out. It certainly gives rise to many possibilities! Nice little poem. Best regards!! :) john.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/27/2015 5:06:00 AM

Thank you very much! It's hard to explain how these words manifested from my thoughts. Wish I could explain... hm...thank you for reading! ~Laura