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The Rusty Gate

8/2/12 Enshrouding blackness leaves me breathless Crippled crows caw for rest upon the iron opening Darkness and greed is their abode The rest are ridden on fire into the starless night Where and when will the dawn lift its head? Crisp and cool is the lifeless ground I tread Until all trails of energy are left for dead Wandering blindly into sheets of hot, sweltering rain Whistling winds leading me to the teeth of the rusty gate As the crows caw their unrest And souls of endless fog cry beneath It is sad and frightening to know That the slightest creak of the opening gate Will bring the wailing souls a beautiful, false Hope. . .

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 10/10/2012 10:06:00 AM
FASCINATING POEM LAURA .. DETAILED VISUALS AND IMAGERY LUV .. UNFORTUNATELY DUE TO THE SITE ISSUES I WAS UNABLE TO COMMENT ON POEMS ABOVE THIS ONE AS VALIDATION KEY DISAPPEARED ..
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/10/2012 9:31:00 PM
Oh, I see. . .well I appreciate your praise and kindness. Thanks for stoppin' by and I hope that error gets fixed. ~Laura
Date: 10/8/2012 2:07:00 PM
wow, I really like this. And it fits great with the Halloween season as well. Even better than the other poem I just read!!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/10/2012 9:31:00 PM
Oh? Well, I say! Thanks! ;D
Date: 10/7/2012 10:40:00 AM
a bit inspirational .. i enjoy the read
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/10/2012 9:30:00 PM
Glad to found this poem inspiring...a bit ;)
Date: 10/6/2012 10:43:00 AM
Oh man this is deep...I like the ending specially. Nice wording too...great work!!!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/6/2012 11:30:00 PM
Thank you--I wasn't sure whether to add the ending or not. But I am glad you liked it. :)~lAURA

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