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The Room

THE ROOM I’ve a wish To spend my musings on little things simple things Little thoughts each in its place Little items about my room perfectly fixed (woods may be full of paper bits of discard the footprints of children abundant and their leavings) (a trash bin tastelessly placed blocks view of a great old tree) (the room’s a mess only as one fears an intruder phone need not be lifted doorbell unanswered sweet music) BUT There are cats in the room Breathing pulse on a terrible complex geometry warping table tops and bottoms legs and arms interrupting lines and joints (how a cat will perpetually lick itself clean self companion with filthy tongue) A fat black Persian’s asleep (without eyes) by the patio door Then a snow white cat in folds a rumpled pink blanket undulating on the floor And A seal point With restless perfect beauty With razor sharp flanks as though clipped each day by elfin barber After petting she’s twitching around growling Astrut in leaps and bounds The intrusion is precious but devastating Day after day there is a poet watching himself compose mind standing off looking at some stale image of mind neither hot nor cold but blowing And I return and return Sit down my hour to write each day Watching the white cat on her pink blanket How the light does play ............................................................................................... This in answer to Carolyn Devonshire's challenge. I also just read a very fine poem about being obsessed with a room, by Andrea Dietrich. Thanks Carolyn for your faith in me. BIG LOVE, daver

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Date: 3/2/2010 3:51:00 PM
WHAT A WONDEFUL SET UP ON YOUR POEM. I MOST ENJOYED READING THIS ONE...I HOPE WHO EVER YOU TAGGED CAN TOP YOURS...BEAUTIFUL.....
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Date: 3/1/2010 7:57:00 PM
A fine descriptive poem
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Date: 2/26/2010 2:28:00 PM
enjoyed reading this, it was different.
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Date: 2/25/2010 12:49:00 PM
Interesting thoughts that you have penned so descriptive that I can see the place when I peep around the garbage can. Sara
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Date: 2/25/2010 9:52:00 AM
Wow...! This one will be hard to top..Daver!! James just tagged me....oh you fellows are not easy to follow with your wonderful words of inspiration for writing terrific poetry!!
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Date: 2/25/2010 6:51:00 AM
ok, Daver !! soup mail!
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Date: 2/25/2010 6:46:00 AM
I accept your tag Mr. Austin...this write of yours has sent mine mind into the frenzy ! Your words insist that you are the poet Sir ! off i go james
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Date: 2/24/2010 8:25:00 PM
a fabulously descriptive piece and beautiful picture painted in the lines ,,as well a flowing answer to anothers challenge,,,Blessings..Cecil
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Date: 2/24/2010 2:53:00 PM
Very, very well done, Daver, you "old codger." Now whom will you tag? You didn't say in the poem, so you might want to add it and let the poet know they've been tagged. Hugs, Carolyn
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Date: 2/24/2010 2:51:00 PM
Love the artistic presentation of this poem. Good use of imagery. You answered the challenge in style Daver. Now, who are you passing it on to. Keep up the good writing!! Karen
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Date: 2/24/2010 2:27:00 PM
You stepped up to the challenge in a big way...I like the format as well..kind of like looking around a room...BG
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Date: 2/24/2010 1:17:00 PM
HI, Daver, glad you liked my poem, although I think YOUR room is much more literal than mine! My room is the imposition of restrictions that formula poetry places on me. This room is a different realm for me. But I like it too. I love reading your random thoughts here and the visuals of the adorable cats!! Luv, Andrea ps great luck in the contest. I wonder if it's a contest I know of already!!
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Date: 2/24/2010 8:34:00 AM
well done....TAH
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Date: 2/24/2010 7:19:00 AM
enjoyed reading
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Date: 2/24/2010 7:19:00 AM
Good choice of words, excellent flow!!! Nice!!!!.....:JP]
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