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The Rising Sea

Like the tides of a nighttime sea, My brilliance wavers and diminishes My words are buried into the moisture of life’s poisons Misfortune clenches my throat from expressing my visions I have plunged into such dark depths Of this mind Without a clear understanding of your devotion Without a better realization Of your never-ending affection Of your ever-pressing lips Onto the prize where your sweet-searching eyes visualize The golden nuances of your genius The pressure of those winning words The winds dance with my intellect, Jolting my heart in loud, silent jeers The waves, black and dusky wait to smother As I crawl into the arms of another This mind still spurts All words that cannot be conjured All feelings that cannot be muttered Truth drowns in the asphyxiation of unfamiliar grounds Rising from these depths as the moonlight glares This mind still spurts As the rising sea In all of its misery Remembers your words and yearns

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Paul Callus

Date: 2/26/2016 4:41:00 PM

Like the rising sea your words of love and yearning rise from deep within, Laura. The winds dance with your intellect, as you look for solace in the arms of another...but not enough to erase the strong memory and smoldering desires. ~ Warm regards // paul

Timothy Hicks

Date: 2/21/2016 12:58:00 AM

This was beautifully penned, Laura ... I loved where my mind went as I was reading the extended metaphor of the Rising Sea. "The golden nuances of your genius" << This is such an epic line, if I do say so myself. Sometimes love has no words to describe it, which makes it all the more powerful and mysterious (though we, being poets, do our best to try anyway!)...

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/21/2016 7:25:00 PM

Yes, we do try don't we? Thank you Timothy, for your sweet and deep responses to my work. Everything I have read of yours thus far is what I consider epic! ~Laura

Justin Bordner

Date: 2/20/2016 8:24:00 PM

The sea of the heart that resents, and fights the gravity of an inscrutable truth, yet the sea of the heart never forgets the source of it's passion, the love which rains into it's lonely expanses, the sky that absorbs and reflects it's deepest colors, this sea of your mighty heart rises with the rain sweet Laura. Gosh, your poems can be such magnifent soul puzzles to me. "The golden nuances of your genius...The winds dance with my intellect." Your weather is dramatic, it lifts me Laura...J.A.B.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/21/2016 7:23:00 PM

"yet the sea of the heart never forgets the source of it's passion, the love which rains into it's lonely expanses"...you're from heaven, arent you? I cherish your comments immensely, Justin. Thanks <3 ~Laura

Lin Lane

Date: 2/20/2016 9:21:00 AM

After having a love that was so cherished, no other can compare. Lovely verses, Laura.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/21/2016 7:22:00 PM

Thank you Lin, you are always so encouraging...<3 ~Laura