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The Rising

Sultry girl Crouching tiptoed on a chair Watching as it rises She fears and welcomes the flood Shivers in anticipation Will she meet the waters with equal force? Or will she be swept away by the depth of his desire? For Forever Malta's Contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 8/18/2016 8:30:00 AM
This is dope simple yet powerful I appreciate good poetry and yes that poem was my first one I have made quite an impact it seems
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/18/2016 8:33:00 AM
That's great Damont. If you have a chance check out my poem "Broken People" I have a feeling you might enjoy it. Take care Rick.
Date: 8/11/2016 10:24:00 AM
Delightful Richard !
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Date: 4/16/2016 11:23:00 AM
Love the surprise in this. Fantastic pictures ran in my head and I love the metaphor!
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Date: 3/21/2016 10:20:00 PM
Congrats Richard: true to my prediction. Cheers SuZ
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Date: 3/20/2016 12:56:00 AM
Hello Richard, Congrats on your awesome win. XOX ~LINDA~
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/20/2016 8:31:00 AM
Thanks Linda. ;0)
Date: 3/17/2016 8:55:00 AM
Aha! Will she meet the waters or swept away by ....his desire? What an imagination! Congrats Richard!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/20/2016 8:32:00 AM
Thanks Balveen.
Date: 3/17/2016 3:55:00 AM
Beautiful imagery!!! Congrats for your top placement in the contest!!! ;-)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/20/2016 8:32:00 AM
Thanks Teddy.
Date: 3/16/2016 11:10:00 PM
Wonderful write n win Richard.. big congrats!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/20/2016 8:32:00 AM
Thanks Upma.
Date: 3/16/2016 6:56:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement, Richard-- I like the buildup in this piece leading to the open ending, well done.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/16/2016 7:29:00 PM
Thanks Sam.
Date: 3/16/2016 5:13:00 PM
I now see your name on the list, Rick. Congrats to you.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/16/2016 7:29:00 PM
Thanks Lin.
Date: 3/16/2016 5:04:00 PM
Congrats Richard. You captured the photo in this poem.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/16/2016 7:29:00 PM
Thanks Rob
Date: 3/16/2016 4:42:00 PM
Richard, congrats on your placement in the contest -luloo :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/16/2016 7:29:00 PM
Thanks Laura.;0)
Date: 3/16/2016 3:28:00 PM
Congratulations, Richard on your winning write. I was checking to see where everyone's muse went on this prompt. You my man went to sex. Sex sells!! Great job. Peace my friend:)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/16/2016 7:30:00 PM
Thanks Daniel.
Date: 3/11/2016 6:29:00 PM
Beautiful poem lovely friend drawn with a nice picture my lovely friend, bl
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/16/2016 7:30:00 PM
Thanks BL.
Date: 3/10/2016 7:57:00 AM
I remember images; and you have gone far out, capturing scenes of rich possibilities. So thoughtful and witty. A winner already.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/10/2016 8:08:00 AM
Thanks Iris, I would love to get your perspective on my "Shattering Rose Glasses. I wrote it for a diversity event at The University of British Columbia.
Date: 3/10/2016 12:46:00 AM
Nice metaphor.....passions rising. Should rate high in the contest. SuZ
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/16/2016 7:27:00 PM
Thanks Casarah! Hugs Rick.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/10/2016 5:37:00 AM
Thanks SuZ
Date: 3/8/2016 8:28:00 AM
You took the prompt picture to a different level. Great. ;)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/16/2016 7:28:00 PM
Oops, thanks Casarah, comment jumped up one.
Date: 3/6/2016 9:40:00 AM
Verrrrry interesting..... wonderfully metaphorical. I like it mucho.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/16/2016 7:31:00 PM
Thanks Andrea. I was a bit naughty.
Date: 3/2/2016 7:56:00 PM
Great twist at the end Richard. Cleverly written.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/16/2016 7:33:00 PM
Thanks Michael.
Date: 3/2/2016 4:28:00 PM
Hi, Richard i'm thinking tsunami here. What ever wonderful poetry..
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/16/2016 7:34:00 PM
Thanks Harry.
Date: 3/1/2016 6:48:00 PM
I came here to read this work again....you have all created a sensational masterpiece..! ps I am back with a new work...;)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/1/2016 11:06:00 PM
On my way to read it.
Date: 2/29/2016 11:51:00 PM
Great passion, and very fitting for the image. Succinct and to the point. Well done!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/1/2016 7:23:00 PM
Perhaps it is fear and desire for it is their first time.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/1/2016 8:52:00 AM
Thanks TJ!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/1/2016 8:52:00 AM
Thanks Timothy.
Date: 2/29/2016 1:49:00 PM
ohh, the last two lines packed a punch, rich... lovely!..huggs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/1/2016 8:53:00 AM
Thanks Nette, hugs Rick.
Date: 2/29/2016 8:54:00 AM
Richard, this is a great free verse, I had the same impression of the girl, that it was water she was fearing, wonderful write, I love it 7 ~
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/29/2016 12:46:00 PM
Perhaps it is fear and desire for it is their first time.
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Constance La France
Date: 2/29/2016 9:17:00 AM
oh, even better... but she looks so afraid..
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/29/2016 8:58:00 AM
In this case it was a lover who would come to her with the force of water.
Date: 2/28/2016 11:05:00 AM
This is fabulous Richard. Hope she doesn't get eaten by any sharks ( watched Jaws last night)?
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/28/2016 12:24:00 PM
Thanks Tim.
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