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The Remains of An End

rabbit tracks darting coming to an end saga scripted in relief... wing imprints in the snow 03.21.2019 Writing Challenge 4, March 2019 - Kimo - Poetry Contest Sponsored by Dear Heart

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Bernard Chan

Date: 5/3/2019 8:08:00 PM

Nice! Love the concept. Such cool imagery. Congrats!

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 5/4/2019 8:32:00 AM

Thank you! I should revisit this form, I liked it.

Allen Beilschmidt Sr.

Date: 3/30/2019 2:23:00 PM

Poor rabbit. well done Maureen

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/31/2019 8:23:00 AM

Tee hee, yeah, poor bunny, that one and the one I'm stewing today ;) Thank you Allen! xomo

Constance La France

Date: 3/25/2019 3:11:00 PM

Maureen, congratulations on your win in my contest. Nature can be cruel but each creature must eat to survive ~

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/25/2019 4:07:00 PM

Thank you so much Constance, for the prompt and my placement :) xomo!

Kibuuka Michael

Date: 3/25/2019 9:49:00 AM

great! nice one really!

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/25/2019 4:06:00 PM

Thank you! :) xomo!

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 3/24/2019 10:31:00 AM

The eaglets had a feast that night! Nice one, Maureen. Congratulations!

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/24/2019 11:34:00 AM

A fine feast had! ...yummy bunny ;p Thank you Caren! xomo

Joseph May

Date: 3/24/2019 10:19:00 AM

Congrats on your win Maureen..

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/24/2019 11:35:00 AM

Thank you Joseph. xomo

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/24/2019 8:10:00 AM

- Congratulations on your winning poem in the kimo contest, Maureen :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/24/2019 9:22:00 AM

Thank you Anne-Lise :) xomo!

Silent One

Date: 3/24/2019 6:57:00 AM

This is a fantastic kimo... you really are the queen of the short form..

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/24/2019 9:21:00 AM

Some like it short ;) Missed you. Thank you my friend. xomo

Timothy Mcguire

Date: 3/23/2019 7:37:00 PM

Great write! I witness that drama on my farm from time to time

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/24/2019 9:21:00 AM

Very cool! I have yet to witness a raptor take prey, it's on my wish list ;) Thank you Timothy, xomo

Arturo Michael

Date: 3/23/2019 6:43:00 AM

Something was hungry...or they went to see a show...

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/24/2019 9:19:00 AM

Lol! ;) xomo

Joseph May

Date: 3/23/2019 4:38:00 AM

Very creative Maureen, well crafted..

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/24/2019 9:18:00 AM

Thank you Joseph, xomo

Ann Gilmour

Date: 3/23/2019 4:10:00 AM

This has to be the winner Maureen, you are the master as you paint a vivid picture with your words. Good luck in the contest! Kindest thoughts Ann xx

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/24/2019 9:18:00 AM

Thank you Ann :) xomo!

Paul Callus

Date: 3/22/2019 4:25:00 PM

Your Kimo says it all, Maureen. We can follow the script and picture the whole sad drama evolving. In my eyes, a sure winner! Warm regards // paul

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/22/2019 5:00:00 PM

...that said, the violence captured in relief was spectacular.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/22/2019 4:50:00 PM

Thank you Paul. I am intrigued by the varied response to this piece; seeing the tracks was the opposite of sad for me, thrilled that not only do I have rabbits living on my street, but raptors too, nature thriving despite the city. :) xomo!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 3/22/2019 11:29:00 AM

You always say so much in just a few words, Maureen..this is brilliant!

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/22/2019 12:53:00 PM

Thank you so much Vijay! :))) xomo!

Jeff Connelly

Date: 3/22/2019 10:36:00 AM

Brilliant as always. For some reason I see a Snowy Owl dining.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/22/2019 12:51:00 PM

I'm pretty sure it was an owl, it was just up the street from me- not prime hawk hunting- accepiters aside, lots of Cooper's Hawks and Falcons around. Thank you Jeff!

John Lawless

Date: 3/22/2019 9:36:00 AM

...and the hawk leaves not footprints....very nicely done Mo

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/22/2019 9:47:00 AM

I like that. Thank you John :) xomo

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/22/2019 4:48:00 AM

- Poor cute little rabbits, Maureen - A great kimo - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/22/2019 8:10:00 AM

They are awfully cute ;) Thank you Anne-Lise, xomo!

Arthur Vaso

Date: 3/22/2019 3:02:00 AM

There is no one better at this! Loved it!

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/22/2019 8:11:00 AM

You are too kind <3 xomo!

Rhona Mcferran

Date: 3/21/2019 10:59:00 PM

Wow, brilliant piece!! Love it! ;)

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/22/2019 8:14:00 AM

Thank you so much Rhona! My first crack at a Kimo ;) xomo! <3

Vickie Hurtt - Thayer

Date: 3/21/2019 6:05:00 PM

Oh...Winner Please! Being a raptor lover and having found at least twenty Cooper's hawk. Red tail hawks and Owl feathers, this is a favorite of mine. Good Luck...Vickie.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/21/2019 8:54:00 PM

Oooh! An enviable collection! ;) Peeked out my front door today in time to see a female Cooper's Hawk in a sneak attack. I had my Merlin and Peregrine feather collection, but having pet birds I don't bring any home anymore. Thank you Vickie! xomo

Eve Roper

Date: 3/21/2019 1:25:00 PM

Great Kimo, Maureen, the imagery is great. Good luck in the contest. Hugs Eve ~`*

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/21/2019 8:46:00 PM

Thank you Eve! My first :))) xomo!

Tom Cunningham

Date: 3/21/2019 1:19:00 PM

Poor bunnies, when I used to go out to work at 04.00 Id see them at the side if the road and as I passed they'd run out in front of my car, must have been my headlights'.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/21/2019 8:44:00 PM

Death wish hare without a care! That reminds me of Bermuda, the roads every morning littered with toads ;) xomo!

M. L. Kiser

Date: 3/21/2019 12:47:00 PM

This was so vibrant in imagery that I had to "fav" it. Just excellent! Good luck in the contest.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/21/2019 12:58:00 PM

Wow! Thank you so much M.L., the image is seared in my memory :) xomo!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 3/21/2019 9:21:00 AM

Intricate ideas here. I can see the wing imprints...wow! Perhaps the wounded flies with its newfound wings. That saga scripted in relief is the part that gets my attention.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/21/2019 10:01:00 AM

Thank you Kim. I have been twice blessed to come across owl prints in the snow, me being the kind of birder that relishes finding pigeon wings... signs of happy hawks ;) ...been waiting years for this poem. xomo!

Pat Adams

Date: 3/21/2019 9:11:00 AM

I'm not a hunter, so this seems sad to me. Some don't care about the life of the wild I suppose, or just think of it as sport. I'm not real brilliant, so I may be missing the point. Regardless, it brings emotion from me, so I thank you for that. Well done my friend and good luck in the contest!.......80)

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/21/2019 9:42:00 AM

I'm no hunter, but I love raptors. Sad if you love rabbits. ;) I love all nature being natural. I saw these tracks in the snow a couple years ago, the story of an owl hunting rabbits in my neighbourhood, Thank you my friend! xomo