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The Rejected Thesaurus

Once again “Man” Fails A faulty miscarriage of stanzas and exhaled anomalies, “Man” withers Unto a Shakespearean passing “Man” testifies Verbal precedence above cedar scented opinions While providing expired empathy to their disfigured reflection Oh, how their insolent pride glimmers Similar to Cubic Zirconium weddings Oh, how their “manhood” Falsely supplicates For even “thicker” pride Another daftly implored lie “Man” inhales pompous remorse, Gripping rusted axe on toxicant bosom, Declaring knighthood upon ignorant crowd Another verse of celebrated memories, Sabotaged Because “Man” Remains glued to authoritative eras of yesterday, With forcefully dimpled “smile” Unable To surgically remove equilibrium's paralysis … But, humanity shall resurrect Against demoted seer To declare that this tide of “man” Does not Belong here ©Drake J. Eszes

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 8/24/2014 7:33:00 PM
I came back for another twist. I enjoyed reading this one again.
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Date: 4/28/2014 3:47:00 PM
PS......and like you, your guest, Gail........was such a surprise........!!! Not at all what I had pictured in my mind's eye!! She was the biggest surprise of all your guests, so far !! I could hear your reaction was much the same as mine.....who'd have guessed??!!
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Date: 4/28/2014 3:45:00 PM
I'm back again to visit the poem I have already commented on....only to say that I hope you will return to post poems...only because there are few who keep my faith alive on this site...faith that people actually aren't only adding up points to be popular, but really do care about the poet, and the poem.I know you are disillusioned..as have I been much too often.and OZ isn't always the wizard...too often is a coward..so I know of which you spoke in the poem you most recently read on your show.
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Date: 3/25/2014 9:51:00 AM
This is the one you read on the show.I love your contemporary style Drake...You carry class and humbleness which crafts your poetry in a unique style.Pride and self boastness lead only to thristiness and unwillngness to learn more and express emotions freely..Well done : )
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Poet Tacito
Date: 4/2/2014 7:54:00 PM
Forgive my tardiness w/responding! Yes, I couldn't agree with you more! Pride is an ugly thing when smeared on the faceless...thank you so much, Charmaine! =)
Date: 3/23/2014 4:54:00 PM
Ps........as always.........that was a great couple of hours of discussion/poetry readings, and guests .., by the way !!! I was sorry to be so late to hear it !! But thankful for the archives !! :)
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Date: 3/24/2014 11:32:00 PM
Many thanks, Carrie! Some of the topics really had to be said. True story. =D
Date: 3/23/2014 4:52:00 PM
I was away on the day of your last radio show, but after listening for the last couple of hours to the archive of you and "Just Archaic" discussing poetry, and the Soup, and then now reading the depth again, here within this poem of yours........how can he (Archaic) not be totally blown over, and revise his thinking of free verse..versus rhyme??If a poet who excels as you do here can't convince the merits of free verse..no one can! Betcha his has a new opinion after you have read your work !!!!
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Date: 3/24/2014 11:31:00 PM
You're ALIVE! YAY! And, yes, I think we all made Chan into a believer that day. ;-) Mission accomplished! Thank you so much, Carrie!!!
Date: 3/23/2014 12:57:00 AM
Great poem. I've heard you read this one. ~Soup Mail~
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Date: 3/23/2014 8:35:00 AM
Very cool. Thanks, JT.
Date: 3/21/2014 5:18:00 PM
Great to be able to read this, while listening to you read it. Great poem, and an excellent show. Thanks for both.
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Date: 3/21/2014 7:25:00 PM
Many, many thanks, Scott! That's very appreciated! :)
Date: 3/19/2014 5:20:00 PM
Okay.. I'm back.. I just heard you read this poem out on your radio talk show and I was ecstatic--so glad to hear you read it! Always, Laura
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Date: 3/19/2014 8:39:00 PM
Huge, huge hug!!! You need to call into my show one day!! Id love to hear you read. :) Thank you, Laura.
Date: 3/19/2014 3:09:00 PM
So.. back on top form with this one Drake-- "unable to surgically remove equilibriums paradise"--- you show off!!! As they say... some people swallow dictionaries--- you have swallowed both dictionary and Thesaurus !! As always.. in awe of your writes. Lots of Love Xxx
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Date: 3/19/2014 8:37:00 PM
Lol your support and thoughts have me smiling. For the record, not showing off. :P My best wishes to you and your husband!
Date: 3/19/2014 1:37:00 PM
preceding words a push.. you drove it home so well for me. And I just really like this verse! I also really like the seventh stanza, particularly the last line, "Declaring knighthood upon ignorant crowd"..you craft your words well and artistically, and they are absolute in my mind. I also admire "this tide of 'man' /does not/ belong here." Anyway I'll shut up! But I love this one, Drake! I need to sit down and read more of your stuff. Really cool.. Always, Laura
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Date: 3/19/2014 8:29:00 PM
I am truly, deeply grateful. Seriously. Youre damn awesome.
Date: 3/19/2014 1:33:00 PM
Your poetry just has that modern, liberal feel to it, which I really admire. I feel like this is a message for humanity to not be so firmly stuck into the ways of the past, and perhaps maybe in this poem we are encouraged as people to break away from that sort of grounded pride and resurrect into the now. Not sure if you implied any of that in this piece but those couple of things drifted along my mind. Also... effective...is the little pause right there at the end. It really gives your--
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Date: 3/19/2014 8:27:00 PM
You know, youre something else, Laura. :D Youre very spot on with your entire comment(s). You caught and grasped the inner message here ever so brillantly. Fantastic.
Date: 3/19/2014 10:45:00 AM
ohhh, man has definitely enlarged his ego's terrain unable to apprecate his divine beginnings... back to his cave where he belongs, drake... i like the element of crazed frustration here... awesomeness!. huggs
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Date: 3/19/2014 8:16:00 PM
Yes....yes they have. Thank you my dear, Nette!!!
Date: 3/17/2014 9:25:00 PM
But Drake, We always did it this way!! lol 7 my best, chuck
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Date: 3/18/2014 12:09:00 AM
Ha! Yeah, it's ain't working anymore. It's not cute. It's just asinine now. Thank you kindly, Chuck!
Date: 3/17/2014 9:14:00 AM
Yay a new poem! As always I am twisted around your words. I am now a qualified contortionist.
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Date: 3/18/2014 12:05:00 AM
=D You're........welcome??? You rock, Richard.
Date: 3/16/2014 10:24:00 PM
Your writes always have a deep meaning to them! And this one is no exception! I hope that "man" can come out of his slump and reach for the stars! Our definition of ourselves varies from person to person just like the route you took within this poem! I really enjoyed reading this awesome piece here this evening! What an outstanding poem, Great Work!!
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Date: 3/17/2014 8:22:00 AM
Russell, seriously, I hope so too. Perception can be our worst enemy or our best friend...thank you so very much, sir!
Date: 3/16/2014 8:42:00 PM
Well...again I find myself pretty stumped but drawn to your words...I feel its another someone high horsing around pretending to be something they're not.all full of themselves tooting their own horn..even of I'm off my rocker I enjoy your writing drake...always such a challenge..never just a skim over reading...I really absorb your words
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Date: 3/17/2014 8:20:00 AM
DONNA! =D Hi! FYI, it's just fine to be off your rocker, but still be accurate. ;-) I'm living proof! You're very sweet, Donna. Thank you so much!
Date: 3/16/2014 12:48:00 PM
OH MY MY MY!!! It is a doozy! I'm all a wonder at the inspiration here, but I KNOW....I'm to come away with my own interpretations, right? ;) You won't give anything away...anyway! Hey, DRAKE! I've missed you and your intriguing writes...This one...the emphasis on MAN and the fixation with past realities...WOW! HUGSSSS!
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Poet Tacito
Date: 3/16/2014 7:54:00 PM
=D Why thank you! You too!
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Date: 3/16/2014 1:03:00 PM
:) Thanks!!! You're a nice dollop of sweetness to my...evening! You have a nice day, ya hear?
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Date: 3/16/2014 1:01:00 PM
Yes, walk with your own interpretations. :) That's the beauty of this. It's core, it's trigger, isn't always so obvious. ;-) You're adored, Eileen. Thank you so much.

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