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The Queen of the May

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Children in the village are filled with joy Waiting patiently for the grand parade Each one has a task every girl and boy Sandwiches prepared and tables are laid Laden with treats and ice cold lemonade The may pole bedecked in ribbons so bright Children gasp at such a beautiful sight Kate dreams of becoming Queen of the May Elegant and poised and so full of grace Prays so hard that it will come true one day Her lovely dress made from cream coloured lace Fresh flowers will frame her pretty young face They’ll dance round the maypole on grass so green Just for one day will Kate be the May Queen? Girls dance around in bright coloured dresses Judges choose who is the prettiest girl Sweet scented blooms are pinned in their tresses Ribbons are plaited as the children twirl The May queen in crowned her minds in a whirl Kate’s the prettiest one the judges say Dreams do come true; she is Queen of the May 03~05~15 Contest: On The First of May – Isaiah Zerbst My first attempt at Rhyme Royal – ABABBCC ~awarded 4th place~

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Edward Ebbs

Date: 5/8/2015 11:06:00 PM

Very Nice Jan, Congrats on your win!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/9/2015 5:12:00 AM

Thanks so much Ed:-) Hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 5/8/2015 6:08:00 PM

Congratulate you and your wonderful win a 7. Happy Mother’s Day: ~)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/8/2015 6:10:00 PM

Thanks so much Eve:-) Hugs jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 5/8/2015 4:50:00 PM

Congrats on your win Jan...nicely done

Jan Allison
Date: 5/8/2015 4:51:00 PM

Thanks Joseph I found this form a challenge am so glad Isaiah liked my poem:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/8/2015 2:53:00 PM

This was a great poem and I am glad to see it on the winners' list, Jan. BIG congrats to you, sweetie pie

Jan Allison
Date: 5/8/2015 2:56:00 PM

Thanks Andrea I found it a real challenge to write and complete I am so glad Isaiah liked it:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 5/8/2015 2:48:00 PM

Hi Jan, congrats for your 3rd Place win for this lovely poem. Lots of imagery and detail portrayed in a difficult form. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 5/8/2015 2:51:00 PM

It was my first attempt at this form am so pleased Isaiah liked it - i struggled to write it - it took me about 3 weeks to finish - I did the first stanza then stopped lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Skat A

Date: 5/8/2015 2:36:00 PM

JAN, CONGRATS in Isaiah Zerbst's contest *SKAT*

Jan Allison
Date: 5/8/2015 2:42:00 PM

Many thanks Skat I always enjoy the challenges Isaiah sets us:-) Hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/8/2015 2:27:00 PM

Jan. Congratulations on your first day of may win. Love LINDA

Jan Allison
Date: 5/8/2015 2:28:00 PM

Thanks so much Linda I didn't realise it had been judged:-) Hugs Jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 5/4/2015 9:47:00 PM

Sweet Jan, such a joyous beautiful presentation of MAy.. :)!!!! :)! hugs and hugs~olive eloisa :)!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/5/2015 1:08:00 AM

Thanks so much Olive - its a new form for me and I found it quite a challenge:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/4/2015 4:02:00 PM

this is wonderful. My only objection is that you made it Queen KATE. Doesn't she have it good enough already. Does she have to steal the May day spot as well? hahaha. It was a pretty good attempt at Rhyme ROyal, Jan. Is it supposed to be iambic pentameter. it's been ages since I did a rhyme royal but you did a royal good job!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/4/2015 4:24:00 PM

I originally called her 'Joy' but then that was in conflict with the first stanza - just wanted a one syllable name - have seen variations on rhyme royal one said 10 syllables and the rhyme scheme the other mentioned Iambic pentameter so I went with the former - I found it a real challenge - just hope Isaiah likes my first attempt:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 5/3/2015 11:31:00 PM

I didn't even realize the form until I read the comments. So you must have done it right...lovely Tim

Jan Allison
Date: 5/4/2015 2:29:00 AM

I am sure the meter could be sweeter but it took 3 weeks to finish it and I did persevere :-) Hugs jan xx

Kp Nunez

Date: 5/3/2015 7:56:00 PM

A dreamy 1st of May scene you've captured, Jan. On a complicated form too. Good luck! Kim :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/4/2015 2:28:00 AM

I was totally out of my comfort zone Kim but gave it a go:-) Hugs Jan xx

Thomas Martin

Date: 5/3/2015 6:09:00 PM

Liked your RhymeRoyal and your descriptions! God luck in contest!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/4/2015 2:28:00 AM

Thanks Thomas I was out of my comfort zone with this one as i like to write in conventional rhyme which to me flows better - took nearly 3 weeks to get round to completing it after on stanza but i persevered and that is the main thing:-) hugs jan xx

Judy Konos

Date: 5/3/2015 5:51:00 PM

This is very lovely. Thank You

Jan Allison
Date: 5/3/2015 5:53:00 PM

It was my first attempt Judy am sure it is far from perfect with the meter but I can only learn if i try new forms:-) Hugs jan xx