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DEDICATED TO BROKEN WINGS!

The door was stiff with rusted bolts but I did my best the pool of sweat and the rain of tears can all attest. There were whispers and taunting from fear but great determination and anticipation covered my ear. In the heat, your loud, sharp cry gave me the feel of snow so healthy in appearance and weight- new life in a show. My new found love exponentially grows which I’m about to promote thinking differently, my blessed child sees the world as remote. Sensitive to every touch, already proving social yet gone and missing was existence’s marshal. Making me wonder if that was its exact command praying and wishing it faces nature’s reprimand. My heart anticipates whether it’s a prince or princess but life in union with death is a deadly incest. You touched down on planet earth with your face looking up the sky you just landed but to acquire your wings and fly. The inevitable crossing to the other side wasn’t your intention I was ready to pull the heavens down for an intervention. Ten minutes after the miracle, joy bathes a soul already faded but at the same time life is mocked for the blessing to be shaded.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 5/6/2017 7:41:00 AM
I'm glad I read this one a thoughtful piece.
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Date: 5/8/2016 3:32:00 PM
A soul touching write, Funom. When my husband had passed on my youngest son was only 4; he said that God needed another angel to help him out. The beauty and truth of the innocent. Keep well and stay your own special self. Mikki
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Funom Makama
Date: 5/9/2016 10:09:00 AM
I am so sorry for your loss my dear Mikki.... God will continue to keep us under his umbrella of love and protection and He will take us through the navigation of life's beauty and roses.
Date: 5/7/2016 4:31:00 PM
Wow, that is outstanding Funom. You have skill with this my friend
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Date: 5/9/2016 10:08:00 AM
Thank you so much. I really do appreciate your wonderful comment.
Date: 5/7/2016 12:15:00 AM
I find this so cute. And when I say it is, it means a well-written piece...
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Date: 5/9/2016 10:07:00 AM
Thank you so much. I really do appreciate your wonderful comment.
Date: 5/6/2016 10:40:00 PM
Funom, Heart touching couplet. Very reach & outstanding piece. Enjoyed each line. A sad thought was penned very brilliantly. Super 7 from me. Added you as my fav poet..........//:) hugs
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Funom Makama
Date: 5/9/2016 10:07:00 AM
Thank you so much. I really do appreciate your wonderful comment.
Date: 5/5/2016 7:23:00 PM
This is beautiful Funom, sad yet some how hopeful.
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Date: 5/9/2016 10:06:00 AM
Thank you so much. I really do appreciate your wonderful comment.
Date: 5/5/2016 7:06:00 PM
God bless you with your beautiful words Funom.
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Funom Makama
Date: 5/9/2016 10:06:00 AM
Thank you so much Kelli White and I say a big AMEN!
Date: 5/5/2016 6:09:00 PM
Wow. Tough topic, but very well handled. This is gut wrenching, and sadly beautiful at the same time. Very well written, sir. -G
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Date: 5/9/2016 10:05:00 AM
Thank you so much. I really do appreciate your wonderful comment.
Date: 5/5/2016 5:04:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your work..If for a contest, it reads like winning material to me..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Date: 5/9/2016 10:05:00 AM
Thank you so much. I really do appreciate your wonderful comment.
Date: 5/5/2016 3:10:00 PM
Funom, thank you. "I was ready to pull the heaven down for an intervention" Oh yes, I cried to God, for help but none came.. I buried my beautiful baby boy instead, I love this poem, it touched my heart and soul, and of course it is a fav and a 7 ~
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Date: 5/9/2016 10:04:00 AM
I am so glad you liked it. It is my own humble way of identifying with your loss. My only brother died when he was just 6 months old, even though its already 22 years since when it happened, I really fit into the shoes of anyone who experiences this. God will see you through, keep you strong and take you through the roses and colours of life. Once again, thank you very much for appreciating this.
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Kelli White
Date: 5/5/2016 7:07:00 PM
God bless you and help you through your loss.
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The Grahamburglar
Date: 5/5/2016 6:11:00 PM
=*( I didn't know this about you. Let us all hope that heaven has bigger plans which we will one day understand. -G
Date: 5/5/2016 1:52:00 PM
- Beautiful in words and pictures, Funom - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/9/2016 10:01:00 AM
Thank you so much. I really do appreciate your wonderful comment.
Date: 5/5/2016 1:23:00 PM
Beautifully written, sweet and sour is the content. Alas such is life.
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Date: 5/9/2016 10:01:00 AM
Thank you so much. I really do appreciate your wonderful comment.

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