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Our earthbound concepts stifle and betray. By living in the now, our every move’s testimony to desires wrought in tales. Our actions marred by spectacular fail, but many lessons learned are treasure troves, still earthbound concepts stifle and betray. From numerous relationships I’ve bailed; the eager lovers passing by in droves, testimony to desires wrought in tales. Often condemned by society, Holy Grail of idealism that rebounds, and strove by earthbound concepts stifled and betrayed. Some friable notions foisted upon hale and hearty folk who similar’ behove testimony to desires wrought in tales. We cleave to original mistake,* nailed by brazen sillage† of the sin of love for earthbound concepts—stifled and betrayed. Testimony to desires wrought in tales. NOTES *‘Technically, sin itself was a Christian invention, a mistranslation of the Hebrew word chait, meaning error, a mistake.’ From the novel The Secret Purposes, by David Baddiel. †Sillage in perfume refers to the aura or trail created by a perfume when it is worn on the skin. It comes from the word in French for ‘wake’ and can best be described as how a fragrance diffuses around the wearer. Sillage or diffusion in fragrances can also be called the ‘projection’ of a fragrance.

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Date: 6/12/2022 11:29:00 AM
The original mistake was in believing one's god had a special rule for mankind and none for other creatures. Aloha!
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Date: 6/12/2022 1:31:00 PM
This is very insightful, Rico

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