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The Onlooker

My thoughts crawl from the gray sky and sigh through the debris of time in not so steady form-- Like the muted shadow in the middle of the road, like the gaze of onlookers, who wondered why I heard not the incoming death

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Paula Larson

Date: 12/24/2008 7:03:00 PM

Ernesto ~ Thanks again for your interest! Let me know for certain how to break down the information. From the Writers Digest judge, I need to focus on including "reviews" on a back cover, etc. A photo appealed to him, and my sense of delivery, he wanted less rhyme, and more context, I'll scan and send you when the Paper returns. The feeing content of my work was very well received! This will indeed be interesting. If I don't do this all of my plans to cordinate at this new address are for 0.

Paula Larson

Date: 12/24/2008 6:57:00 PM

It seems I rate high in "grammar" a 4 out of 5, which is considered excellent, then a 3, a 2, etc. The local paper have the report, so there is some coverage there also. This is still my work of five 5 years ago, and from those 111 poems, now have the 280. Self publishing is more interesting to me because you can decide your preliminaries. My cover received the lowest rating, because the real artist was arrested for looting wealthy persons out of town, and went in for five. What luck.

Paula Larson

Date: 12/24/2008 6:53:00 PM

Ernesto ~ Merry Christmas - As an onlooker this time of year, there is much to see you may not want in your private life. One, however, is your unique delivery of perhaps a very uncertain, and depressed individual, who negated his time was short!! Come on! Ernie ~ Hey yes thanks for the suggestions and inclusion in your successful program on the internet. I will need to file through each request you sent. I received a review from a judge with Writers Digest here in the States. More later!

Brian Strand

Date: 12/24/2008 1:33:00 AM

Like the enigma here Ernesto.Thanks for your kind words and wishes.Rgds Brian & Christmas Blessings to you & yours