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speedy delivery … the baby is safe – so I come down to earth. (I now realise I need a bird book - I saw it as a stork until I saw other's write about a pelican so I fully understand if I do not place.) The Not So Original Monoku Challenge sponsored by Timothy Hicks 04~01~16

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Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/7/2016 8:48:00 PM

I thought it was cute and endearing myself ... (maybe the pelican snuck in at the stork factory?) ...

Jan Allison
Date: 4/8/2016 2:31:00 AM

Yes the pelican took over from the stork that day as they were short on delivery staff lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/7/2016 3:16:00 AM

Hey Jan. Check out my blog if you get the chance ... I mentioned you :)

Jan Allison
Date: 4/7/2016 4:36:00 AM

Thanks Timothy I do appreciate you featuring my poem - I fully appreciated I would't place - but do like my interpretation of the image albeit with the wrong bird lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath

Date: 4/2/2016 5:25:00 PM

Very nicely penned my lovely friend. Wish you good luck in the contest. Loved always, bl

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2016 5:26:00 PM

Thanks again BL:-) hugs jan xx

David Mohn

Date: 4/2/2016 2:57:00 PM

very cute Jan...good luck in the contest :)

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2016 2:58:00 PM

Thanks so much David:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 4/2/2016 2:03:00 PM

Whether it's a pelican or a stork does not really matter...both work at the Post Department:) hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2016 2:58:00 PM

ha ha ha great one Paul:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 4/2/2016 2:32:00 PM

I have just been informed that the stork was unavailable, so the pelican took over...thus....stand in delivery!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2016 2:04:00 PM

LOL Paul - long as the delivery is safe that is the most important thing:-) hugs Jan xx

Jean Murray

Date: 4/2/2016 1:57:00 PM

I love this. Good luck.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2016 1:59:00 PM

Thanks Jean - I guess in your profession this would appeal to you:-) :-) Not sure if I have got it right for the contest as it's a pelican not a stork but I didn't want to change it:-) hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 4/2/2016 5:28:00 AM

Wonderful monoku Jan... best wishes..

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2016 5:41:00 AM

Thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 4/1/2016 8:08:00 PM

Love your take on this, Jan! Perfect, stork or pelican! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 4/1/2016 8:09:00 PM

Thanks Sandra I hope Timothy likes it :-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 4/1/2016 8:01:00 PM

Jan, pelican or stork, nice write ~

Jan Allison
Date: 4/1/2016 8:09:00 PM

Thanks so much Broken Wings - I have never seen a pelican and thought it was a stork lol:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/1/2016 7:15:00 PM

hahaha, laughing at your note you wrote underneath it . I do stuff like that all the time. You can always think of something else. Or you can make it a pelican who brings babies!!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/1/2016 7:19:00 PM

I have never seen a pelican ao when i saw the pic I thought it was a stork and wrote the poem lol- will stick with my initial thoughts but wont be upset if I don't place:-) hugs jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 4/1/2016 6:52:00 PM

yeahh, jan.. love the imagery of this one; startling.. gawdd, i'm so busy on gthe road..later.. huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 4/1/2016 6:56:00 PM

I'm not sure if it's what Timothy wants Nette but win or lose I'm happy with the poem:-) Hope you are having a wonderful trip:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 4/1/2016 4:41:00 PM

You delivered a nice monoku Jan...best wishes...

Jan Allison
Date: 4/1/2016 4:45:00 PM

Thanks Jospeh - I think I'm off target with this one but I am happy even if I don't place in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Jill Spagnola

Date: 4/1/2016 4:32:00 PM

You rock Andrea always penning from a terrific open, imaginative mind :)

Jan Allison
Date: 4/1/2016 4:37:00 PM

Thanks Jill - I have gone out on a limb with this one so won't be surprised if I don't place but I have to go with the flow of my pen:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/1/2016 3:29:00 PM

- A sweet one, Jan - ("the baby is safe".....the stork:) - Luck in contest and happy weekend - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 4/1/2016 3:34:00 PM

I'm not sure it is what Timothy is really after but I have to go with my muse and I saw the bird as a stork - have never seen a pelican lol:-) hugs Jan xx