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the night is freezing fast

and under a starless ceiling the fumes flood in like plumes of breath in February-frosted air fusty flu fumes gas fumes though there is no flue just phlegm tar-sticky in snow-stung lungs this winter a whiteout of words snow-diamond freeze down on my luck down on my knees in every way on the floor not only before the oven door whatever lies beyond snow-soft the little cloth cushioning my cheek the bell jar of night presses in and upon stifling candle buds that fade to dull blue duds the bone-hooded moon grows cold and glows above the shaken turning globe the voiceless snow fatal flowers begin to bloom in arbours of arteries heart-hued like the fuchsia's blood bells like the roses I bled from everything blood-bright vein flames that blazed in vain igniting a touchpaper of pain whatever lies beyond *Lines 12 and 16 reference words from Sylvia Plath's poems 'By Candlelight' and 'Medusa' The title is borrowed from A.E. Housman's poem 'The Night Is Freezing Fast' 12 May 2023

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Date: 2/17/2024 1:11:00 PM
Dearest Charlotte, Your poem about Sylvia Plath, left me breathless and deeply moved. Your words carry the weight of Plath's struggles, knitting together word pictures of winter's chill and the suffocating pressure she often wrestled with. You masterfully capture the feeling of being "down on my luck, down on my knees," not just metaphorically, but also physically. I particularly admire how you utilize color imagery. These visceral details bring Plath's inner turmoil to life with stark beauty. Charlotte, your poem is a powerful tribute to Sylvia Plath. It captures the essence of her pain and struggles with sensitivity and artistic vision. It echoes the uncertainty and ambiguity that permeated Plath's life and work, leaving a lasting impact on the reader. - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 6/26/2023 2:27:00 AM
Nothing better on a Monday to read about Sylvia. It's like they both go together. In saying that, I do like the pain running through this write. Don't know if that's good or bad mind you.
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Date: 6/14/2023 11:33:00 AM
I keep coming back to this masterpiece--you're awesome lady!
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Date: 5/17/2023 12:29:00 AM
Congrats! Thanks for sharing this... making me learn all the more the essence of "showing" in creative writing. God bless you, and belated happy Mother's Day.
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Date: 5/16/2023 8:18:00 PM
how darkly rich and extravagant your writing is...congratulations on this beauty :)
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Date: 5/16/2023 10:37:00 AM
Charlotte, please forgive my delay in responding to your masterpiece. Even though your poem is about melancholy and suicide, I wanted to savor each of your beautifully chosen words. Every exceptionally written line is a journey into the depression that lies beyond melancholy and the grieving for a poetic talent lost too soon. Our world struggles to treat mental illness and its effects - the ways it robs people, and us, of their potential through no fault of their own. Congratulations!
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Date: 5/16/2023 10:19:00 AM
Your poem is definitely melancholic! It seems many in Sylvia's time took their lives as if to say "ha ha, you can't have me, even if you don't want me." It's sad when talent is ended like that. Your poem is magnificent! Congratulations!
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Date: 5/15/2023 7:49:00 PM
Congrats on your top win, Charlotte! The “bell jar” reference took me right to Sylvia Plath...excellent descriptions to put one’s mind in a melancholy mood! :)
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Date: 5/14/2023 7:17:00 PM
A very beautiful scene narration and word painting. Congratulations!
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Date: 5/14/2023 7:03:00 PM
Quite a remarkable write that takes the suicide of Sylvia Plath and fuses it with the icy choke of snow, a claustrophobic snow globe, a bell jar, the gas stove - the final fumes that silence life. Truly inspired writing! Congratulations! Brian
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Date: 5/14/2023 7:02:00 PM
Yes, I thought Sylvia Plath as I read “bell jar.” Though very sad, I love her poem “Tulips.” Congratulations on your top placement, Charlotte!
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Date: 5/14/2023 1:43:00 PM
Congrats on your top win with this winning melancholic blend of misty reflections. Amazing. God bless you, Love, Gina
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Date: 5/13/2023 3:37:00 AM
Our Sylvia was a bit of a sad case, wasn't she. You could just see her at the oven, jumping from a high height, throwing herself in front of a train. Trying to remember how she did it now without googling. Nice of you to cheer us up on a sunny Saturday as the football nears.
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Date: 5/13/2023 1:13:00 AM
I knew it reminded me of Miss Plath... she was such a sad story. Intriguing and eventful thoughts, insights, poetry. God bless you friend. Love, Gina
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