Get Your Premium Membership

The Necklace Broke

The necklace broke; all the little pieces went scattering across the kitchen floor. Pretty beads were rolling into creases of a bright rug that lay before the door. In order to retrieve the beads, she tried to kneel to grasp the remnants of her prize. Some minutes passed. The girl broke down and cried small pieces of deep anguish from her eyes. That cherished heirloom worn by her each day (because it was the last thing given her by her dear mother who had passed away) would be so hard to fix! And now a blur the room became. The beads she could not see, for tears rained down her face mercilessly.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

12
Date: 7/6/2017 2:31:00 AM
Broken beads, broken memories and 'broken' tears'. Congratulations on your win. Kai
Login to Reply
Date: 7/5/2017 9:24:00 AM
Nice write Andrea, you made the depth of anguish really stand out, congrats on a fine placement!
Login to Reply
Date: 7/5/2017 7:25:00 AM
Congrats on your win Andrea, I like how you used "small pieces" again to describe her anguish.
Login to Reply
Date: 7/4/2017 10:01:00 PM
congratulations on your placement with this terrific write Andrea.
Login to Reply
Date: 10/8/2016 12:22:00 PM
A very heart rending poem, Andrea. Very expressive and emotionally charged. You made me feel the girl's pain and anguish. You have deft writing skills for sure. And such a prodigious repertoire to peruse. Well let me have at it. I'm a gonna be workin' like John Henry on that railroad track. Love and peace.
Login to Reply
Date: 10/5/2016 4:47:00 AM
This is very powerful Andrea...
Login to Reply
Date: 10/2/2016 2:03:00 PM
I enjoyed reading this. Lead me to the secret of writing poetry effortlessly like this. Hahaha, just kidding. I love reading your poems always.
Login to Reply
Date: 9/25/2016 9:34:00 AM
Oh I see congratulations are already in order. Congratulations on your 2nd place win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis
Login to Reply
Date: 9/25/2016 9:32:00 AM
Hi Andrea, I agree with Kim, this well written piece just tugs at the heart strings. I have a feeling it will place well in the contest. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. A without a doubt seven:-) Alexis P.S, I see why Arthur got inspired by this piece.
Login to Reply
Date: 9/24/2016 4:30:00 PM
This tugs at your heart, and you can feel the girl's anguish. Beautifully written, Andrea! Congrats on your 2nd place win! Love, Kim
Login to Reply
Date: 9/24/2016 4:26:00 PM
Sublime! A Fav!
Login to Reply
Date: 9/24/2016 4:11:00 PM
Sometimes, when under stress, all it takes is a mishap like this to allow the pent up tears to flow.
Login to Reply
Date: 9/24/2016 10:09:00 AM
Andrea, this write touched me deeply because you may know or not but I do have such a necklace, a pearl necklace that I treasure, so of course I love this poem so much, CONGRATULATONS on your win in my contest ~
Login to Reply
Date: 9/24/2016 7:46:00 AM
Very sentimental write:) congratulations on your win, Andrea:)
Login to Reply
Date: 9/23/2016 9:04:00 PM
Congrats on your win Andrea
Login to Reply
Date: 9/23/2016 8:57:00 AM
Lovely lovely and lovely, again a joy to read you Andrea.
Login to Reply
Date: 9/23/2016 8:23:00 AM
This moved me to tears. I love your sonnets dear sonneteer.
Login to Reply
Date: 9/23/2016 3:53:00 AM
I can understand this type of pain, Andrea. I lost a lot of family photos in my recent flood and tearfully had to toss them. This is a creative approach to the contest and each verse is genuinely moving. Wishing you success! (Also glad you got the pendant and chain. Thanks for the lovely card. When I return from NH, I'll be posting a contest that offers jewelry to the winner.) Take care, dear!
Login to Reply
Date: 9/22/2016 10:53:00 PM
what a great write.... deserved the placement ......Seren
Login to Reply
Date: 9/22/2016 7:51:00 PM
Beautifully expressed in your lovely Sonnet to fit the theme, Andrea. Congratulations on your fine placement in the contest.
Login to Reply
Date: 9/22/2016 5:09:00 PM
Coming back to say Congrats! Agnes
Login to Reply
Date: 9/22/2016 12:38:00 PM
If that has ever happened you know the despair. I had it happen to me but it was not an heirloom. Your touching poem brings great emotions Andrea. 7 ; )
Login to Reply
Date: 9/22/2016 11:13:00 AM
Sad, Andrea :-( Did you try a Dyson Vacuum Cleaner? Treat yourself to a new pearl necklace or some Himalayan rock-salt crystals -- which will surely benefit you more than old beads (sentimental feelings notwithstanding)....
Login to Reply
Dietrich Avatar
Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/22/2016 2:34:00 PM
Good grief. that wasn't me. hahaha. I just made it up!
Date: 9/22/2016 10:59:00 AM
awhh, teary-eyed, andie..i remember my mom who celebrated her birthday sept 17.. i miss her; this is a resplendent poem!.. huggs and soupie
Login to Reply
Date: 9/22/2016 6:07:00 AM
This is do sad ma. Thank you for sharing..........A.M.
Login to Reply
12

Book: Shattered Sighs