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She poses, perched on tip-toes, on a chair. Beneath black underwear are long white thighs. Round her pretty eyes falls chestnut hair. She poses, perched on tip-toes, on a chair. A fantasy is she, at whom men stare. She feigns fragility, but it’s all lies. She poses, perched on tip-toes, on a chair. Beneath black underwear are long white thighs. Written March 5, 2016 for the Vizualize, Scrutunize and Remark Contest of Forever Malta

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Date: 3/20/2016 12:58:00 AM
Hey Andrea, Congrats on your awesome win. XOX ~LINDA~
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Date: 3/20/2016 12:54:00 AM
Well done Andrea.
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Date: 3/17/2016 8:57:00 AM
Congrats on your placement, Andrea! Love the line that she is a fantasy!
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Date: 3/17/2016 3:58:00 AM
....just passing by again to congratulate you for your amazing piece!!! ;-)
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Date: 3/16/2016 11:13:00 PM
Wonderful write n win Andrea.. big congrats!
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Date: 3/16/2016 5:16:00 PM
Indeed, she is about as fragile as she is innocent. Congrats on your placement.
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Date: 3/16/2016 4:48:00 PM
Andrea, wonderful poem! Congrats on your placement...-luloo :)
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Date: 3/16/2016 4:44:00 PM
Congratulations on this work Andrea, I was drawn into the melody of this sultry piece so smooth and alluring. Well done.
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Date: 3/16/2016 4:11:00 PM
Hi Andrea, Congrats on your placement with this enchanting poem. I really like the sultry sing-songy refrain. Cheers, Brian
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Date: 3/16/2016 3:39:00 PM
Congratulations, Andrea on your placement in the contest. I see your muse sort of went the same direction as mine except mine went a little left towards the humor. I was just checking to see where everyone's muse took them. Peace my dear friend:)
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Date: 3/15/2016 12:17:00 PM
Sweet write Andrea.
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Date: 3/10/2016 6:10:00 AM
Beautiful, sensual, intriguing..... I LOVE IT!!! ;-)
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Date: 3/8/2016 9:25:00 PM
Nice Andrea. What a match for the photo - Lindsay
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Date: 3/8/2016 11:25:00 AM
Love the form you chose with this. It gives it an air of mystery like the expression in the photo.
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Date: 3/7/2016 5:37:00 PM
Let the ballerina dance..Enjoyed reading this one..Reads like a winner for the contest..Thanks for dropping by..Sara
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Date: 3/7/2016 2:16:00 PM
Very nicely done! :) hugs
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Date: 3/7/2016 7:31:00 AM
Looks like a perfect poem to me!
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Date: 3/6/2016 6:50:00 PM
I went for the piano keys, because I actually play piano. It was really tricky trying to talk about it when you couldn't even use words like "piano, music, melody or fingers".... lol! Curious where you went with the black sheep image (that image didn't even load on my computer for some reason)...
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Date: 3/6/2016 6:14:00 PM
What a pretty picture you create here! I have entered a poem in Lone Star magazine's contest. Good luck in your contest! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 3/6/2016 6:06:00 PM
Andrea, wow, this is excellent, wonderfully penned and I am loving it 7~
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Date: 3/6/2016 10:48:00 AM
Hey, I haven't written anything new in a while. Been overworked and that kills my creative imagination. However, you are the creative one. These models are like actors. We can't really believe what they have to pitch. But, it is part of a fantasy that we can and do easily slip into.
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Date: 3/6/2016 10:30:00 AM
You capture the essence of the model Andrea. Lovely Triolet...you do this form so well...re my haiku...I had already fixed it when you read it.
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Date: 3/6/2016 6:57:00 AM
- :) ... a great poem for this contest, Andrea ! - Good luck .... remember it is a man who will judge the contest :)) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/6/2016 5:37:00 AM
A fantasy is she, at who men stare says it all. Very nice Andrea tastefully written. excellent entry.
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Date: 3/6/2016 2:37:00 AM
Very interesting one, Andrea. "She feigns fragility, but it’s all lies." I like that line..her pose is quite purposeful and the repetition of her pose on the chair highlights that well. Awesome job! Always, Laura
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